TPO-21 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your ans
We can see that hard work in study in high school is very important to be good in quality of life. May some people point out that people will have great succcess in job if he has communication ability with others but some credit hard work in study to be successful in job. In my opinion, I believe it is very important to learn a more in high school to become successful and I will illustrate my point in subsequent paragraph.
hard work in school makes person more brilliant and prodigious in work. Especially, they will learn a valuable skill in their high school and these skill is important aspect to impress people to be successful in the future job. For instance, I have learnt a massive skills in computer degree like software running, data editing, graphic design, etc. that techniqu, ia had learn from a intense effort in ny high school. my boss got impressed by this work and I had very luxury moment ot continue mu jon now. In this case, my skills in communication hardly play a any part to contribute success in my life. since, talented people can success in life, study assidously create this character in people and certainly makes huge impact in their life apex point.
experience is very essential to make people good at work which is essential compoenent in future job. In school, people indeed have good experience in relevant field that makes people use to in the future field. since the practice makes the man perfect, likewise experience inhigh school makes people perfect in work and becomes flawless in their work. As people always admire the people who instills the perfection in work, there is no doubt they have advantage over another in jon market. Let me share you my personal experience. When I was in college, I have a lot of experience in research and i were very good at a lab work. Due to this, good skills in handling lab work have been buit inside me. Fortunately, this skills helped me to secure a immediate job from a lot of competition just after the graduation. In this way, hard work cause good experience in people that pays well people to get culmination in future.
At last, habit of hard work builts the capacity of dealing with the tougher problem in your future. since, complication is also part of success and people who can deal with calmly can secure success in the life. people who fair and had no habit of dealing with problem have worse chance to adopt the terrible situation. Back in my high school, my friend was very reluctant to do hard work but he had a capacity to deal with the people effective way. after the grauation, he did find the job but his estrangement to work with trouble made him quiet ajob. like this way, hard work is necessary to act as antibody to trouble.
In conclusion, people who have done hard work in their college life have good skills, experiecne and capacity to beat trouble which is core requirement ot be sucessful in future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Hard
... my point in subsequent paragraph. hard work in school makes person more brilli...
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Line 5, column 143, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this skill' or 'these skills'?
Suggestion: this skill; these skills
...valuable skill in their high school and these skill is important aspect to impress people t...
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Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'skill'?
Suggestion: skill
.... For instance, I have learnt a massive skills in computer degree like software runnin...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...phic design, etc. that techniqu, ia had learn from a intense effort in ny high school...
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Line 5, column 373, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'learned', 'learnt'.
Suggestion: learned; learnt
...phic design, etc. that techniqu, ia had learn from a intense effort in ny high school...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., etc. that techniqu, ia had learn from a intense effort in ny high school. my bo...
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Suggestion: My
...rom a intense effort in ny high school. my boss got impressed by this work and I h...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... my skills in communication hardly play a any part to contribute success in my li...
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Suggestion: Since
... part to contribute success in my life. since, talented people can success in life, s...
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Suggestion: Experience
...e impact in their life apex point. experience is very essential to make people good a...
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Suggestion: Since
...akes people use to in the future field. since the practice makes the man perfect, lik...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ave a lot of experience in research and i were very good at a lab work. Due to th...
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... have been buit inside me. Fortunately, this skills helped me to secure a immediate ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...nately, this skills helped me to secure a immediate job from a lot of competition...
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...hat pays well people to get culmination in future. At last, habit of hard work built...
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Suggestion: Since
...ith the tougher problem in your future. since, complication is also part of success a...
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Suggestion: People
... calmly can secure success in the life. people who fair and had no habit of dealing wi...
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Suggestion: After
... to deal with the people effective way. after the grauation, he did find the job but ...
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Suggestion: Like
... work with trouble made him quiet ajob. like this way, hard work is necessary to act...
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Line 17, column 169, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ich is core requirement ot be sucessful in future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, likewise, may, so, still, well, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 87.0 52.1666666667 167% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 520.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66153846154 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77530192783 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49752540249 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459615384615 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3555350126 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2307692308 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80769230769 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190868328804 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628423545444 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043023911982 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119846756998 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518057072202 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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