For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children (five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's progressive and sophisticated world where we live in, no one can turn a blind eye to the significance of education. When it comes to question that whether the five to ten years old children desire more budget for their education or adults, there are different ideas. While some people inclined toward the opinion that government should allocate a huge sum of money on kids' education, others hold just the opposite idea, and consider the adult's education more important to become a prosperous society. Personally speaking, I firmly believe that the first group carries more weight. In the following paragraphs, I will cogently explain my reason to justify my viewpoint.
First of all, the better the children of a society are educated, the smarter the society will be. To clarify, intelligence is more flexible during childhood, and we can easily boost children's cognitive abilities by engaging them with extra tasks, but there is no such flexibility for the adult. According to the psychologists, IQ is become stable after age 10, and the time before this age is a golden time to increase the average intelligence of the kids. This is something achievable just by enhancing the level of education they receive. For instance, the Japanese are one of most smart people of the world, and they exporting advanced industrial equipment to over the world, they are creative and invent so many things every day, which economically is a breakthrough for the government of Japan. Because, in the past, they allocated great amount of budget for kids to learn different variety of learning material. Therefore, the more money is invested in kids' education, the more innovative teenagers will go to universities in the near future and the more profit the government can gain.
Secondly, for some purposes university could be so late. to put it in a vivid picture, I ask you think about mental health prevention programs. Prevention is always cheaper and more effective than the cure is. Child are innocent and vulnerable to some deceases, environmentally or physically. And if a government care about the health of the society, it should spend more money to recognize the kids who are vulnerable to some behavioral problems, and prevent that before it becomes too late. Without such programs in one country crime would increases, and teenagers even did not get the university. Moreover, prevention is always is cheaper than cure. Teenagers who commit crimes or suffer from inefficient behavior are probably trouble makers and costly to society. For illustration, just imagine a society with, health, assertive, educated and innovative members, and compare it with an opposite one, a community that’s members suffer deep health uncured problems. Let alone society, they couldn’t help themselves. Therefore. It is very cost-effective to invest money for kids and provide some programs to prevent their prospective mental health disorders.
For all above mentioned reasons, I consider the education of children more important than the adults.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2558.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22040816327 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.872245797 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555102040816 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 827.1 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6478624206 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.583333333 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4166666667 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263580307732 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0632358745916 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0636988050734 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171957856549 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300568515844 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 58.1214874552 74% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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