Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.
Throughout the history, people have made different decisions for gaining success. There are two main thoughts influencing the way of success. On the one hand, people tend to believe that taking risks and trying novel things are the keys to success. In the other hand, demos assume that only performing well a familiar activity leads to success. Although I might understand the second stance, I am prone to buttress the first one. The reasons on which my prospect is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, people who try new things and activities and who do not afraid of taking a risky action have more experience and expertise. We understand that education is important but some knowledge may be acquired only via going beyond known. A successful people do not avoid working with challenging situations and thus they get valuable experience which cannot be learnt from textbooks. By contrast, a person who sticks to doing only a well-known activity has quite a limited expertise. Scientists state in some recent researches that risky people are better prepared and have more profound understanding of their work thus they are more successful.
Secondly, people who are prepared to try something new are more noticeable. There is no secret that today's labor market is quite competitive. Colleges and universities keep graduating new specialists and a person who may take risks will have an advantage over the rest of the people. This person is more attractive for employer because he demonstrates enthusiasm, desire to improve his performance and willingness to address challenging and difficult tasks which will be usually avoided by people who get used to doing the same job; I remembered from my last work place, our employer created some evaluation tests for the employees’ performance in which he assumed a high price gift for a motivated and enthusiastic person , Also, he tried to warn person who did not care about doing the job well and was not eager to learn new ways of doing a task.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person to believe that only doing well-known actions someone may reach success. However, I still affirm that success will be more likely achieved by doing new activities and taking risks in as much as the world keeps changing quickly and a person who avoids trying new will inevitably be less efficient and thus less successful. Moreover, endless repetition of the same actions may increase number of mistakes because people usually lose concentration while performing familiar actions.
To wrap up, trying to do new and taking risks give a person more experience and expertise which make him more valuable and therefore more successful person. Additionally to it, this kind of people is more appreciable and noticeable and thus they are more likely promoted.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...e and therefore more successful person. Additionally to it, this kind of people is more appr...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10752688172 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76451907447 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509677419355 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 732.6 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 107.588695968 48.9658058833 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 118.75 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322810908736 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104221328227 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074416671559 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20169024526 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311839246126 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.