Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Everyone in society is eager to become a successful person, but how did the outstanding people do to become successful? There are two choices-attacking and defending. Although someone tends to choose the second aspect, I give my vote to the first without hesitation. Success does not come for nothing. It's the one who dares to step into dangerous new territory brings the fruit of success back. Their bold decisions, courage, ingenuity, and effort are the reason why ordinary people call them successful people.
Let's take the failure of Nokia as the first example. Nokia used to be the biggest smartphone maker in the world; it has released many excellent masterpiece smartphones like the N series. But now, people rarely see Nokia's advertisements on the television, the Nokia smartphone has gone, and Apple took its place, why? Because Apple is the first cellphone maker give up the physical keys and adopt the full touchscreen to interact with users. This bold decision brings huge success to Apple, and people start to throw the Nokia cellphones into the garbage bin and buying iPhone.
Success is always accompanied by risks. That is to say, the people who want to become successful has to overcome the risky problem. Sometimes they fail. For some businessperson, their company may bankrupt and lose all the money. But for people who pass through this hardest path, they become the most renowned person.
Although staying in the comfort zone can be quite safe and comfortable, people will lose the chances to become successful. Doing what one quite familiar with is very comfortable since it consumes much less brain power in thinking. That's where the term 'comfort zone' comes from. Wolf, which is the most deadly and powerful species in the snow area, can survive in extremely difficult conditions. But once they get caught and domestic by the human, they are no longer need to search for food and live in their comfort zone. Later on, they lost the capabilities of hunting in wild and become dogs, human's pet. No longer the pride in the white plain.
In conclusion, success does not come from nothing. For the people who want to gain success, they should not stay their comfort zone since the world outside their original concept is much more brilliant and full of chances.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
Everyone in society is eager to become a successful person, but how did the ou...
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Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...ion. Success does not come for nothing. Its the one who dares to step into dangerou...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
... people call them successful people. Lets take the failure of Nokia as the first ...
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Line 7, column 232, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...umes much less brain power in thinking. Thats where the term comfort zone comes from....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, as to, in conclusion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96875 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54846682531 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591145833333 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.212732626 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.32 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.36 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177724981059 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458223331054 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0444088394903 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972701806845 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396171181339 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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