do you agree or disagree?people should take time to relax with hobbies or physical activities that are very different from what they do at work.
The question is whether people should spend time on entertainments or physical activities which are different with their main task, for relaxing or not. Everyone with regard to his private view point may maintain a specific direction toward this statement. Some believe that the mentioned activities can be accounted as waste of time and workers should take time to gain new information in related their work while others have a conviction that relaxing would increase the employee's performance. I am unanimous with the latter group; so the next paragraphs will vastly elucidate my vantage point through three salient reasons:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that such a technology-driven world requires people spend much time on working and earning money; hence, this condition can impose a lot of pressures on human beings. If people do not try to change the mentioned circumstance, gradually depression or even worse the suicide thoughts will overcome them; consequently, not only they can have negative impacts on productivity in workplace, but also they must spend much money on their treatment. Doing physical activities such as swimming, playing tennis, miscellaneous exercises and or participating in interesting activities such as going to concert and listening a master piece of music or experiencing exciting funfairs can assist workers to avoid any stress or anxiety. As a matter a fact, taking time for hobbies can give people a sense of peaceful.
In addition, one should considerate that attending in favorite activities is able to challenge the humans' ability. Scientifically, researchers could have recognized that when human's brain confront new experience, for coping with the aforementioned event, it starts secreting more Endorphin- a neural messenger in brain which is responsible for creating happiness and concentration. Definitely, a man who swims three times in the week can make few errors in work place again a person who attempts just to work and work. Here there is a suggestion. If companies allow their employees to spend time on their interests, the bosses would take advantage of this situation and they will not need to spend much money for laborers' health insurance.
Moreover, such great activities can improve interpersonal skills among workers. During involving in hobbies, the workers can meet different people who share the same interest with them; therefore, new friendships can form beyond work place. Furthermore, people can debate with each other and exchange their experience about work habits.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that taking time for amusements and exercise can help people to maintain their sprite high and also the employers can guarantee their profit.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
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Suggestion: humans'; human's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, such as, to begin with, to sum up, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 9.8082437276 265% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2324.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39211136891 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92366036025 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591647331787 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 701.1 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.588466322 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.25 100.406767564 145% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9375 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.625 5.45110844103 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26008294599 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0871084427609 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584813538734 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143343010342 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588515212254 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.