Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Nowadays, people strive to prepare a better and comfortable environment for themselves and their families. In this regard, they have a numerous options in many aspects such as choosing a proper job, doing some new things, etc and they have to choose a best one among them. Some people believe that doing and allocating time to issues that individuals are good in them are best choice that successful people can be done. On the other hand, other argue that taking risks is better option for being successful. I, personally concur with the first group's notion, and I will elaborate on my point of view in the following paragraphs.
Firstly, doing tasks that people have experienced and know how to do is more reliable for being successful. Nowadays, ones have faced a plethora of challenges in their lives, and their mind is completely occupied with managing them in a best manner. So, most people prefer to prevent other external points to enter their full programs. One of this things that can have detrimental effects on humans' performance is taking risks. Because this action leads to stress and tension, and it is a obvious issue that people's performance will decrease when they have stress. On the other hand, if individuals do what they know about them and have experience with them, they will remove a great amounts of stress from their mind. Thus, they can have a better focus on their jobs or other tasks, and they can be more successful.
Furthermore, they can save their time and money if they do tasks that they know how to do well. Although taking risks would provide some significant chances and opportunities for people who are able to mange themselves when they face difficult issues. These issues are unpredictable when we take risk . Because person who take a risk does not know details about that task. Therefore, In these situations not only can people waste their time for finding a proper way for their success but also they allocate considerable time in this regard. On the contrary, if ones do what they know about, they familiar with the upcoming challenges in their works, they can save both their money and their time.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that doing what we know how to do well provide significant advantages for people. Not only do they are more confident, and their way are reliable, but also they can prevent wasting their money and their time . It is highly recommended that by choosing a reliable way for their tasks, they can enhance their chance for their success.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, thus, well, such as, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2086.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79540229885 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47680567329 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462068965517 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.1123311838 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3333333333 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.309945960903 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1120854993 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0836267894975 0.0737576698707 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217541121466 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506466468044 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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