successful people try new things and take risks rather than only what they already know how to do well.
it goes without saying that in our today's sophisticated and complicated world, people have to engage with a lot of activities and skills in order to provide necessities of life. however, recently, there has been an active controversy among people about whether it is better to try everything which is new to reach to a successful life or try to stay on our own way and just do what we know to do well. although it is slightly hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I personally adhere to the fact that it is more sensible to concentrate on a specific career for our entire life. The following paragraphs will elaborate more on this issue.
To start with, our mind is programmed to perform more efficiently when we try something for several times. Put it in other words, as we doing some task repeatedly, we master on that specific task. A newly conducted research in some developing countries demonstrated that people who did not change their careers and stay in their familiar job positions for more than ten years have better performances by tenfold than the workers who are willing to stay in every job just for roughly a year. An example can drive this notion home. I have worked in an enterprise for 5 years after my graduation from high school. I realized which I have some talent in writing short essays and letters. trying to concentrate on my duty to just write essays for the company instead of doing unrelated tasks, I became the special employee whom all the company wanted to deal with In order to write them a highly sophisticated letters which can impress other companies and attract them to make some contract with us. Had I not focused on one task, I would not have been able to reach such position among my co-workers.
In another point of view, someone who has a very risky character, always what to try new aspect of life, although it could bring an array of merits for some special individual who would not be affected by the adverse event of life, for the majority of people, it will bring nothing but disasters. As an illustration consider the example of my older uncle. he was very talented when he graduated from university. however, he was a real adventurer and generalist. he was not able to choose a rightful field to work on. Therefore he change several jobs in 15 years from the rage of secretory, to engineer. but no one could not fulfill his desire. it is true that he followed his dreams in variety of sectors, but he could not become a prosperous individual because he had not adequate skill and potency in neither of the fields he tried to master. Had he stay in a real good job position, he would have had a prosperous job in the age 40.
In conclusion, drawing upon the aforementioned reasons, it not a sensible decision to try a vast variety of careers in order to succeed. Not only can we master in a task by focusing on it, but also we can have a very prosperous and stable life with doing the things we know how to do well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in other words, it is true, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2443.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53246753247 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61391649375 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489795918367 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 84.1936062123 48.9658058833 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.217391304 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4347826087 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140854413815 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0323113753148 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063217958688 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10428483899 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616784167477 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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