Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
By and large, individuals attempt to provide a better and comfortable situation for themselves and their families. They need to make the right decision among a plethora of choices when they face challenges. It is a controversial question among many scholars, whether taking risks or doing familiar tasks are crucial for being a successful person in society. I personally believe doing tasks that we have experience about them provide considerable benefits for individuals. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view.
Firstly, doing an occupation or tasks that persons are familiar are more reliable for being a prosperous person. It is crystal clear that when ones want to start any jobs or works, they need to enhance their knowledge and understanding through available sources. If people believe with their knowledge and they have confidence in themselves, they will affect their performance while they are doing a task. On the other hand, people without having a self-confidence about their abilities will face many problems, and these have adverse impacts on their performances. For instance, consider a person who has a great background with the stock market. Therefore, he would buy and sell stocks without any risks. Because he has enough experiences in his job, he can make great profits. On the contrary, if he has not knowledge, it is possible to lose all his investment.
Furthermore, doing what people know how to do well is less stressful and time-saving rather than taking risks. Nowadays, people try to decrease their stress and tension in order to have a healthy life. Therefore, taking risks have an adverse effect on the human's mind, because they allocate some part of their mind to think about the consequences of that decision. They have struggled with themselves most of the times, even their leisure times and times that they spend with their families. On the other hand, if people know they have made the right decision about their tasks, they can make better moments for themselves and their families without any stress and tension.
To wrap it up, I am of the opinion that doing tasks that people are familiar with them have plenty of advantages for them. Not only can they have a reliable path for their success, but also they can remove unnecessary stress and tension that will face by taking risks. It is highly suggested that people do jobs that they have experience and knowledge and increase the chance for their success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, by and large, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2074.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03398058252 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6749422874 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483009708738 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4985700443 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7619047619 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.619047619 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252985137259 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822086097932 0.076458572812 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102609878289 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171861596635 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647488739271 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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