Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only do what they know how to do well.
We all hound success. Success in life is contingent upon several factors, and strict to the comfort zone is one of the most important of them. Although sporadic success come by trying new things and taking risks, following the strong zone has no equal to become successful in life.
To begin with, trying new things and taking risks often hampers reputation and good name; confidence thus fades away. To become successful self belief has no other equal that comes from experience. When we try to do anything new we feel discomfort which leads us to a stage from where we can never taste the success. For example, my brother was a famous cook of traditional dishes of our country. He had a restaurant which was running in full swing and he was benefitted from that business. At some stage, however, he learned from the website about the western dishes and wanted to incorporate those in his restaurants. Supplanting the traditional dishes with the western ones, in which he was a tyro, he changed his restaurant into a fast food shop. Quickly he started to taste the bitter truth and found himself full of debts to others as he made a tremendous amount of loss in his new business of fast foods. Consequently, he lost his self belief and could not find success in any business he tried after that loss. If he could follow his own comfort zone and tried to improve his restaurant without trying any new things, he would definitely be able to sustain his success in the business as he had experiences in that field.
Secondly, trying new things forces us to become unsettle and try new things as we lose our patience which is important for becoming successful in life. Without giving sedulous effort we cannot expect to do anything good in our lives, but when we grow the habit of trying new things, we hardly have that perseverance to wait for success. For instance, a businessman should wait for long period of time after investing in a certain business. He should spend times to research on his customers and ways of advertising. If he fails then he should try to find out the reasons of his failure before starting a new business. But without doing any research if he abandons his business and try to settle in new kind of business, he would not find himself among the unsuccessful ones. Before trying new things he should spend time to find out what is his strong point and how he can manage to become successful within his strong zones.
In conclusion, to become successful we should strict to the comfort zone. A tendency to try new things could hamper our self belief and make us unsettle, which hinders our successes in lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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... his customers and ways of advertising. If he fails then he should try to find out...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65665236052 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51129079235 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463519313305 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.671253072 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.6363636364 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202894959139 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0711310805888 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063166256655 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146007982786 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296550176535 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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