TOEFL essay:People remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Sending gifts is the most heart-warming way to show one's love to others. People remember special gifted they have received and these gifts somehow have great influence on their life. I think there are two reasons.
To begin with, a special preset full of love offers people the feelings of being taken care of. When people prepare gifts with care and consideration, such gifts can surely impress receivers and give them unforgettable memories. For example, last winter was harsh and one day, the temperature suddenly dropped so drastically that my usual gloves was not enough to defeat the cold. However, when I was on my way for school, I met my homeroom teacher and she noticed my gloves were too weak to prevent such harsh weather. Without saying a word, she immediately took out a pair of spare gloves from her purse and asked me to wear them. I felt touched and heart-warming as soon as I replaced my old gloves with new ones. I still use these gloves after so many years after that day, I will never forget her thoughtful gift. Thus, when a present is sent with love and care, people will never forget and assuredly cherish them.
Second, in addition to a gift with great amount of love, sometimes a randomly picked present can have significant influence on receivers. A gift may offer people a brand new idea and direct them to guide them to a certain path where they find themselves desire to engage in. An experience of myself is a compelling example to this. When I was a kid I was given a box of Lego toys as a Christmas gift. At first, I only considered it a toy which was perfect gift for a kid, however, soon after I played around these blocks a few time, I was fascinated with the idea of creating constructs which could built with various blocks. I had exerted my imagination on this marvelous toys and I even made up my mind to become an architecture in the future. Had it not for this seemingly suitable gift for a child, I wouldn't have discovered my talent and developed my interest in building.
To sum up, people remember special gifts or presents that they have received. Because these offerings provide not only people the feeling of being loved and taken care of, but also vital insights into discovering a potential career choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun time seems to be countable; consider using: 'few times'.
Suggestion: few times
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... seemingly suitable gift for a child, I wouldnt have discovered my talent and developed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, for example, i think, in addition, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1864.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 403.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6253101737 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53679824421 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5682382134 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9240682663 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.2 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193639056286 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071305865289 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105387548983 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160369992607 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070312755229 0.0645574589148 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 11.7677419355 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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