TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

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TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.Use specific reaso

Nowadays, students have to participate in many classes and they have to do many assignments. They must read for their tests. Furthermore, for obtaining good degrees they have to spend most of their time studying. They do not have sufficient time for spending their time out of university. So, I think universities must have sports teams, gyms or places for social activities. I have many reasons.
First, I think personally, students spend most of their time studying and because of that, they do not have any activities. So they get fat and maybe they get diseases. For example, when I was at university, my college does not have any places for exercise. I got fat. I have to go out of university and spend a lot of money on doing exercises. This work wasted both my money and time. I knew many students that had this issue. After a while, the university establishes a place for sports and it was very useful for all students.
Secondly, I think being in sports and social activities make us happy. We can meet different people and obtain various experiences. We live in a big world and there are many different people in this world. Thus, I think it is important that we know them. Finally, we want to work in society and we have to communicate with this people and knowing them is important. By participating in activities we can improve our social skills.
Finally, I think studying is not everything and we must improve ourselves spiritually and physically. So, we must pay attention to our body and soul by doing sports and by being in social activities. So, I think sports and social activities are important whether the university cares about them or not. But I think, building places for doing sports and social activities in universities are not only useful for students but also helpful for improving the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...s. We live in a big world and there are many different people in this world. Thus, I think it ...
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Line 3, column 323, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...society and we have to communicate with this people and knowing them is important. B...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, while, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 52.1666666667 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74842767296 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73961282347 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.471698113208 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9569785006 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 62.9166666667 100.406767564 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.25 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117000740314 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0396215686566 0.076458572812 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046337111636 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0814726342042 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038386158897 0.0645574589148 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.38 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.66 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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