TPO-01 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Universities have long been known as centers of education and studies. Nowadays, so many people believe that universities can play an important role in encouraging the young youth to improve their social skills and sports activities. Some people, however, still think that universities are the cradles of knowledge and the government must prepare some special places for doing social and physical activities. Personally, I think that universities should give attention to both studies and social activities equally for some specific reasons.
First, social activities are one of the most important parts of every individual person’s life, especially students. Students all around the world need to communicate with different people who may have different backgrounds and cultures. Therefore, improving social skills would help them to contact others in the best possible way. For instance, I had a friend who was from Syria and she was ashamed of talking to other people. At that time, there was a club at university that students could join and practice communication and talking to others. I suggested that club to her, and after two weeks, I really felt the change in her confidence and the way she used to communicate.
Secondly, physical activities have an essential impact on our health. We need to be healthy to study and complete our educations. Hence, universities should pay attention to their students’ health. Physical activities help us to breathe more properly, stay fit, and even release the levels of stress. As an example, the first year that I entered the university, I was an over weighted person and not only had I problem in breathing, walking and even sleeping, but also I was going to be mentally sick. I always felt like others are making jokes about me and this really reduced my confidence, so I always felt stressed out. Nevertheless, after registering in the universities’ sports club and losing some weight I became more confident and calm.
In addition, time is so important for students. As we know, students need to attend classes for four or five hours, and study for something about six hours per day. Therefore, they will not be able to care about their mental and physical health so much. However, as I mentioned before, we need to be healthy to study in a sufficient way. Hence, universities have to force their students to work on their social and physical skills, and this happens when the university has some fruitful clubs for these activities because travelling to other places wastes so much time.
In conclusion, universities must receive enough financial support for sports and social activities in order to improve communications, have healthier students and avoid wasting much time. I suggest joining different clubs to all students because it will promote the development of different skills and therefore, increasing their self-confidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a sufficient way" with adverb for "sufficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... before, we need to be healthy to study in a sufficient way. Hence, universities have to force thei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2447.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19532908705 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81502402121 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526539278132 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 754.2 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6915990333 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.958333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.625 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149565161091 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0442872443964 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478541804629 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0912838659564 0.150856017488 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356255708844 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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