TPO-05 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do-rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is no shortage of debate whether people today should spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like rather than doing things they should do. In my view, human beings opt to do things their way, meaning they love and enjoy what they are doing. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, mankind are easily attracted to the things they want to do in their lives. They say output or material will comes out naturally and spontaneously if you are not forced to do it. For example, I am very interested in Music and creating songs for our glee club. Therefore, I am very inspired to write and create arrangement for my composition because it is my passion to give melody in my words and truly that makes me happy. In addition, working on things you love to do will provide you with a sense of creativity and productivity because you exceedingly wants to excel on your craft. On the other hand, when you are just being forced to do stuff because you need to do it, then the outcome usually tends to be unproductive and you are unwilling to cooperate due to you don't like it.
Secondly, having the passion and drive to do things your way will give you a more sense of meaning or purpose in life. It's like you are on your job and you love what you do for almost everyday, you don't easily get tired or bored. For instance, I am a dialysis nurse now for 4 years, I really love dealing with my patients, talking to them, helping them with all their needs. Even if it is a difficult job because you are dealing with their precious life, but instead I look forward each day going to work. It is my calling to help people who needed my help and I enjoy and love to spend my time doing this.
To summarize this, I believe that people definitely spends their time doing things they love. This is because humans are more productive and creative in the craft they are working on if they love what they are doing, also, it gives them self fulfillment and purpose in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 123, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'come'
Suggestion: come
...lives. They say output or material will comes out naturally and spontaneously if you ...
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Line 3, column 312, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... Therefore, I am very inspired to write and create arrangement for my compositio...
^^
Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[4]
Message: The pronoun 'you' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'want'
Suggestion: want
...nd productivity because you exceedingly wants to excel on your craft. On the other ha...
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Line 3, column 785, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...u are unwilling to cooperate due to you dont like it. Secondly, having the passio...
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Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...job and you love what you do for almost everyday, you dont easily get tired or bored. Fo...
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Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ve what you do for almost everyday, you dont easily get tired or bored. For instance...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 380.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37631578947 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.27527204547 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507894736842 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4569523548 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9375 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 5.45110844103 190% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.401791355132 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155976604028 0.076458572812 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149501656386 0.0737576698707 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.292234908313 0.150856017488 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129031507298 0.0645574589148 200% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.42 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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