TPO-08 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Is evident that television advertising make the children thinks a lot and some time there are good things showed for tham. Therefore, I don’t agree with the statement that Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed for two reasons.
First, the televison advertising is good for the children in many aspects. There are good actions and good things that is showed for them. For example, when I was children I didn’t liked to read. It was horrible, and my parents and relative ever try I read something. One day I was watching TV and I saw a advertising showing the Harry Potter’s Book. I get very interesting to read this book, and my cousin bought and got for me like a gift. I read and I learned like to read. Thus, I could obsevaded this situation that advertising is good, since that I ever was reading.
Second, in many of advertising show childen been good and doing good action. And this entails the children do the same. For instase, my girlfrind have a cusin, he has 5 years. One day we was watching TV and passed a little boy taking the trash on the box of trash. He looked for us and said: we can’t put the trash on the floor, this is horrible and when we do this we get the Erth sad. I looked for him and say yes… you are right, we need preserve our planet, because this is only place that we have to live.
But, how all in the life have contrasts, in some ocasions is not good for children. For inlustrate, when I was young I remember of one advertising that passed on TV, it was about a scholar objects, and the child that was presenting said: I have and you not, I have and you not, I have and you not… After a time, I read in pscologist section in a newspaper a pscologist saing about it. He tould that this kind of adivertising is not good, becouse it became the children possessive.
In conlusion, I don’t have doubt that adivertising have a great impact in the children life, I think that is necessary that the parents always have attention in that the children are watching. Therefore, I don’t agree completly with this statement, since there are good things that they can learnig with the televion adivertising.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 310, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ng. One day I was watching TV and I saw a advertising showing the Harry Potter&ap...
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Line 4, column 474, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to like'
Suggestion: to like
...or me like a gift. I read and I learned like to read. Thus, I could obsevaded this s...
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Line 10, column 309, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...re are good things that they can learnig with the televion adivertising.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56109725686 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6547584147 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.461346633416 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9474957588 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0952380952 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0952380952 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.80952380952 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14200334003 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484556325548 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860274240793 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112550400523 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11272552376 0.0645574589148 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.