TPO 10 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As everything in life is like a coin that has two different sides, people must weight pros and cons before jumping to conclusions. After all, each and every question or topic requires careful deliberation in that there are always multiple variables to a truth. Some people believe that computer games has negative impact on children and it should be not allowed. In my humble opinion, I definitely agree that playing video games can cause harmful effects on our young generation. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the majority of individuals would agree to the notion that spending many hours on computer can have bad effects to the health of our youngsters which can be detrimental. Moreover, children aged 10-15 are prone for addiction in video games due to peer pressure and they want to belong with their friends at school. As a result to this, they skip classes just to play their favorite console. For them it is normal not to attend class and go to computer shops to spend most of their time playing a game. Teenagers usually neglect their well being, often failing to take good care of their health. In other words, some of this teens spends 12-16 hours in front of the computer without eating and going to toilet. They are that addicted to playing games and waste their precious time in nonsense activities. A great example of this is my best friend, Alvin, the first thing he would do in his day is logging onto his computer and playing online games DOTA, after playing 6 hours straight he will eat and resume his game until night. He did not do anything productive for that day and wasted time doing nothing.
Secondly, children must be not allowed to play computer games because it posses health hazards. In addition to this, continuous playing games can cause violent and aggressive behavior to teens. It is because the nature of the games are fighting with each other, so, they feel that it is okay to do so at home or in school because they see it everyday when they are playing. For instance, my cousin, Mel play grand theft auto and after playing it for 2 months, he became aggressive and violent with his peers at school. He kicks and shout at them when he feels like doing and I think it is because of the games he usually play. I believe that there are no positive effects of playing games to individuals, thus, it must be banned most especially to children because they are helpless with this of situation and they are usually the victim with this of leisure activities.
In summation, yes, it's virtually impossible to provide a complete satisfying answer to an open ended question. Although the jury may be out on this essay topic, we can come to a mutual agreement that computer games posses threat to the lifestyle and way of living of our youth due to the reasons and details mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, after all, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.646484375 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37838904861 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.505859375 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.72173128 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.136363636 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2727272727 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299744571687 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.090667321349 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637526501773 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163814125728 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624004485202 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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