tpo 15
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
Correct training of juvenile has an indispensable role in their personal development. Although, some people claim that there is no relation between introducing younger with organizing money and future abilities in economical thinking, but I do not think so. That those people think such way makes me worried. In my view, childhood is the best time for various kind of training specially financial ones. I feel this way for 3 main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, regarding the issue of deep learning in kids, one might suggest that young people should be familiar with concept of spending money. To clarify, when I was 8 years old, I want ed a beauty doll, instead of buying that, my father introduced me with the process of collecting and saving money. Had not my father teach me that lesson, I would not have had my house now.
Another aspect of being responsible for our decision in life especially in economic field is not accusing other people for our stuffs. For example, my aunt does not have house and stable job even in 50 years old. He spent much money on his favorite activities with out thinking for his future. If his parents had thought him about saving money earlier, He could have coped with him financial shortages.
Most importantly, having considered necessity of creative thinking in adults, one might propose that it will practice from childhood. For instance, I know how to invest money in proper and amusing way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 171, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'housed'.
Suggestion: housed
...ffs. For example, my aunt does not have house and stable job even in 50 years old. He...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 261, Rule ID: WITH_OUT[1]
Message: This word is usually written together. Did you mean 'without'?
Suggestion: without
...t much money on his favorite activities with out thinking for his future. If his parents...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, regarding, so, for example, for instance, i feel, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1228.0 1977.66487455 62% => OK
No of words: 251.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89243027888 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55998340299 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.669322709163 0.524837075471 128% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 618.680645161 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.7283543719 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7142857143 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.07142857143 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1010060522 0.236089414692 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329806793415 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0325692345796 0.0737576698707 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0591701427035 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.013467605224 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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