tpo-17: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today the capital markets have straight competition together and use various tools such as advertisements. Most advertisements assert that they make products that coincide with the truth. In my view, the advertisement show products better than they are. There are some overriding reasons for this, which I follow in this essay.
Absorbing most customers is a fundamental cause of showing advertisements products more than they really are. Advertising of Mazmaz Chips is a good example, which tries to effect on children, so it uses different heroes who become powerful by eating Chips to concede children to buy more it.
my second reason is that the advertisements' goal is the most seller that is equal to more money. As a matter of fact, the advertisements have to pay the employee's salary, hotel and plane costs. All of these expenses need a pool of money, so they have to sell more products since the competition between advertisements is high, they focus just successful in this rival. As a result, If they want this they have to show products better than they really are.
Finally, If the advertisements don't show their products more colorful than they are, never affect the people and governments. Since they have a special role in the world of policy, governors always use them. As a matter of fact, the governors to continuing their political life need to gather votes, so they have to show realities more than are, then if the advertisements don't show the realities more than actually are, the heads of states never use them for advertising. For instance, in the last election in Iran, Mr. Bakhshi was a candidate for presidents post, advertisement help and gather a huge number of votes for him by debating that without he, surly we will fight with America and the world-wide will start again, therefore people afraid and voted to him.
According to what has mentioned above, I am harshly agreement with this point that advertisements make products seem better than they really are.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, if, really, second, so, then, therefore, for instance, such as, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1670.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98507462687 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81510105338 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531343283582 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9513919862 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.333333333 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 5.45110844103 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300620407388 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131134297402 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924480073915 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209163461205 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061851734178 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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