TPO 23
There is an old Chinese idiom called that: “If you want to sail for ten thousand years, you must be very careful.” It suggested that we should be very careful to ensure correctness in our life. However, is that still apply to today’s world? As for me, I think it’s more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than being too careful. The reasons as followed.
First, today’s speed of society and technology development is like a rocket. Things may change very quickly without giving us enough time to plan anything well in advance. Take Facebook as an example, which is one of the most fast-growing and valuable companies in the world. Facebook has a motto called “Move fast, and break things.” They use it to encourage the staffs to work faster without being afraid of failure. Because they think the quicker they work, more chances they can succeed. Think about that, if Facebook’s programmers and product managers have to discuss every detail of a new feature on their website, they will waste a bunch of time on meaningless discussion. Even worse, if the CEO of Facebook afraid of making mistakes, Facebook may not be a thing. From this story, we can learn how important is that to work quickly in nowadays.
Second, the competitions between people are rather intensive. One way to out-competed others is to move earlier and quicker. Take my brother as an example. He wanted to apply for MIT. He also found out that, his major usually accept only two students every year. So my brother started preparation early and sent his application to the school very quickly. A month later, he received an acceptance letter from the school, while his classmates still asking teachers opinions.
All to all, it’s great to be patient and careful, but if you want to archive more and experience more, it’s better to take the fast path. In other words, we should not be afraid of taking risks as they can help us become stronger. Take another old Chinese idiom to conclude: “The most powerful way to beat your enemy is to be faster than them.”
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 860, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...n how important is that to work quickly in nowadays. Second, the competitions between pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, well, while, as for, i think, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1756.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.918767507 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68843946723 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605042016807 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6493203692 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8181818182 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2272727273 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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