TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people tend to believe that in today's realities it is more crucial to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to do the work slowly and make sure that everything is correct and under control. Although I can understand people who adhere to the second stance, I am prone to buttress the first viewpoint. The reasons on which my stance is based will be discussed in details below.
Firstly, our contemporary world keeps speeding up and we do not have such luxury as time which may be used to reckon every aspect of our actions. Novel technology has appreciably contributed to this fact and such means of communications as cell-phones, smartphones, laptops and desktops demand us to work quickly and efficiently. Otherwise, someone who is faster than you are will win. Probably the most striking illustration of this fact may be found in a stock market which reacts immediately on the slightest change in the forecasts; moreover, market’ movement mirrors all significant events in the world. In other words, a person who wants to get success has to act quickly and even risky.
Secondly, making mistakes and risking are unavoidable parts of acquiring new knowledge. In fact, if we take a closer look at this idea, we will inevitably notice that our knowledge about the world and ability to control it are quite limited and the very moment when a person reaches his limits, the one has a choice to dare and take novel experience, to go beyond known or to retract and stick to a familiar reality. A human being will always face the difficult, challenging choice and all successful pundits, businesspersons have taken the risk; through making mistakes they got a valuable experience which cannot be acquired from textbooks and an attempt to make sure that an expected result will be reached is an unachievable dream. Thus a person who needs to unearth, to earn new knowledge and expertise has to take risks.
Admittedly, there are some reasons which may allow a person who supports to state that the idea that taking everything slowly and making sure all variable are under control is a decent idea. Chiefly, the person may aver that the cost of a making a mistake and acting recklessly may be too grave. However, I still affirm that today's world requires from us to take risky actions and sometimes commit mistakes. Of course, in some particular cases, when we have, for instance, negotiations between two fighting countries, the attempt to control and desire not to take reckless actions is understandable but at the same time even in such challenging circumstances we still cannot control all variables there is always a possibility for mistakes. Thus we still have to try and suffer consequences.
To wrap up, I strongly support the idea that nowadays world with its steadily increasing pace requires from us to be brave and if necessary to take risky actions. This is only way to be successful and learn something new in the contemporary world.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 27 in 30
Category: Excellent Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2401 1500
No. of Different Words: 257 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.783 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.686 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.823 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...out the world and ability to control it are quite limited and the very moment when ...
^^^
Line 5, column 737, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ll be reached is an unachievable dream. Thus a person who needs to unearth, to earn ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 743, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e is always a possibility for mistakes. Thus we still have to try and suffer consequ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 765, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...ity for mistakes. Thus we still have to try and suffer consequences. To wrap up, I s...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, as to, for instance, in fact, of course, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91633466135 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78543046566 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525896414343 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => OK
Sentence length SD: 88.8838452709 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.894736842 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.63157894737 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194973308092 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0624547971428 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0904859552719 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118662417096 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747380358402 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.