TPO 26, Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
There are various jobs in any society each of which requires some talents and devices. A concern on this issue is which job is more proper for individuals of the community. Some people believe that children are not supposed to choose their parents job, and it is better for them to do something different. In my way of thinking, it is better for them to follow their parent track and choose a job similar to their parent's job because not only can they achieve succession faster, but also they can respond to the society's needs better.
The first reason which should be stated here is that if the children follow their parent's path, they will promote quickly. As it mentioned, each job needs some specific devices and people who have enough experiences and talent in that job. If a person wants to start a job from zero, it will take it many efforts. He may experience many fails in his job, some restricting events may happen that prevents him to do his best, and many other problems that he may confront along the work. If that person does his parent's job, he can use their experts and experiences, so it helps him to do fewer mistakes on the job. Also, he will be able to ask them about any happened problems, and They definitely will be happy to incorporate and solve the problem together. These advantages help the person to progress faster in his job.
The other point which deserves some word here is that doing the parent's job is an efficient way to respond to society requests. Any community has some needs provided by its citizens in different job positions. For example, a society needs nurses, structural engineers, salesmen, firm workers, police officers, and so on. So, there is a balance in the jobs of the society each one does some part of its need. When people do their parents job, they save this balance. On the contrary, if any person does different jobs, he will destroy the balance that causes some of the community's requirements do not be responded.
To summarize, any person has the authority to choose his favorable job, but it is recommended to do a job quasi to the parent's job. It helps them to use the parent's experiences and talents that results in quick progress. Also, it helps the society to keep the balance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 158, Rule ID: NEEDS_FIXED[1]
Message: "needs provided" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'providing' or 'to be provided'.
Suggestion: providing; to be provided
... requests. Any community has some needs provided by its citizens in different job positi...
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Line 5, column 559, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...he will destroy the balance that causes some of the communitys requirements do not be respo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, for example, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44540385213 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9392417671 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.6 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95 5.45110844103 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.409214802313 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148204878235 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116306063456 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296687541399 0.150856017488 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836246356137 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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