TPO 28. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Parents have many responsibilities for their children. One of these duties is taking care of the educational matters because it prepares them for future job and helps them to have a better life. Now, there is a discussion on whether parents today are more involved with their children's education or not, to compare with the past. In my way of thinking, nowadays parents are more concerned about the education because not only is the education significant today, but also the behaviors have changed over time.
The first reason which should be stated here is that today having an academic degree is crucial. In the past, the life was so simple; there were a few complicated jobs which needed academic literacy; more people were farmers and illiterate, so education was not a superior quality and parents did not care about that. However, today the world is a complex place with high levels of science and technology. Most of the job opportunities need special skills which are provided in the universities. Therefore, parents put more attention to the education of their children due to prepare them for a suitable future job.
The other point which deserves some words here is that passing the time the behavior of people changes. In a particular period, some issues may be important while after a long time those issues may not be a matter for people anymore. Generally, people's behaviors change over time. In the past, parents had less responsibility for their children. As soon as growing up, the children had to work hard, girls in the house and boys in the farmland. The difficult condition of the life did not allow parents to put enough time for the children. conversely, today behaviors are completely are changed. The life is more convenient, and children have fewer duties, also parents have more time to take care of their teenagers. So, it leads to more attention to the education of them.
To summarize, the world has made many changes in the people's life. In one aspect, it made them pay more attention to education in order to find a better job position. Also, it changed parents behaviors in the way that feel more responsible for their children. All of these result in the way that parents today be more involved in their children's education than what they were in the past.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Conversely
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Suggestion: peoples'; people's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85496183206 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60107899718 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468193384224 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1477131506 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7272727273 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8636363636 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334634009978 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116468304623 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116318629305 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247890660235 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601995848927 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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