TPO 27
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it is established beyond doubt in such a sophisticated world, taking jobs can affect many aspects of human lifestyle. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is while some people maintain that it is better to take advantage of opportunities of getting a secure job, others may hold a view that waiting to take a desirable job is more beneficial. To my way of thinking, it is worthwhile to wait for a satisfying job position because in this situation not only do people have higher chance of prosperity in their career path, but also they enjoy more happiness in their lives. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first aspect to point out is that, people being employed in a favored job are able to achieve work success more easily. In this case, they feel more motivated as they have chosen their job deliberately while considering their own interests carefully. On the other hand, taking a secure job does not guarantee high level of motivation and in this case, as a consequence, they presumably become exhausted and disappointed as some hardships arises. Moreover, with high level of motivation, one try his best to carry out his responsibilities and fulfill his duties. Accordingly, this bring about more favorable quality of performance which supports higher probability of getting promoted. Additionally, there is a higher chance for a person applying for an appropriate job to have expedient attributes. As an illustration, people often consider a job as a satisfying one when they estimations of their abilities show that they will fulfill the job’s requirements.
But there is a further more subtle point we must consider. No one can cast a shadow on the fact that a desired job can bring about a blissful life. Indeed, the happiness caused by having a suitable occupation make employees able to tolerate tough situations in work procedures. In other words, this will endow them with impetus needed for conquering emerging arduous challenges and achieving the pleasure of success. Apart from this, as previously mentioned, working in a satisfying position make it easier to attain job promotion and therefore it may lead to a higher salary. Although having adequate amount of money does not assure finding joy of life, it plays a vital role in achieving happiness. In particular, sufficient money is a significant prerequisite for obtaining comfortable life.
In a word, by taking into account all these factors, we may come to the conclusion that for a person, advantages of waiting for assuming a job in his field of interest outweigh reasons for taking a secure but not desirable job due to many reasons, among which, higher possibility of achieving job success and having happier life are the most significant ones. Who can deny the importance of job in life satisfaction?
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, while, apart from, in particular, by and large, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05073995772 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98331816609 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.3858529402 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.45 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.65 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288765493659 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0830641664805 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617812400559 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188459169112 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061991065691 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 86.8835125448 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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