TPO 26
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, finding appropriate job has become one of the most vital concerns of all societies and in fact, this factor can influence many aspects of human’s life. The question become more challenging when the impact of parents’ job on children’s future job and also their life is considered. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this idea is while some people maintain that it is more beneficial for children to follow their parents and choose jobs similar to theirs, there are others holding the view that it is better to be employed in a different job position. I strongly believe that jobs that are similar to parents’ professions are more convenient because not only can youngsters learn easier from their parents, but also they can benefit from the network that parents have made during their career path.
One of the primary causes is that parents can teach their children the needed work instructions, methods and knowledge more efficiently. Indeed parents can provide their children with valuable work experience that they earned by years of working and experiencing a variety of difficulties for less cost. In other words, children can become professional workers and avoid gaining work experience which demands a lot of expenses as time and money. Moreover, people can benefit from being under tutelage of their sympathetic and compassionate parents as their work instructors. Parents, generally, have a perfect knowledge about their children, they also properly are aware of their interests and talents and as a result they can guide them in a more convenient and well-wishing fashion compared to anyone else.
But there is a further more subtle point we must consider. By choosing similar jobs children can easily take advantage of having access to the network of people which their parents have made before. In another words it is substantial to consider the significant role of knowing and having connection with right people in work procedures. For example in different situations when a person know whom to contact, he can better fulfill his responsibilities. Apart from this, another important factor for any person to achieve work success is to find reliable people and to gain required work credit that make him trustworthy to others. As an illustration, it is essential to have a trustful working relationship with others and people cannot work with each other only based on rules and regulation. To conclude, following parents’ path, one will have this chance to exploit his parents’ reputation and credibility for his own career advancement and make better use of existing opportunities.
In a word, by taking into account all these factors, we may come to the conclusion that assuming job similar to parents is more advantageous than tanking different one because of many reasons, among which, chance of learning from parents and availability of their working network are the most significant ones. Who can deny the importance of working experience and having access to required network in job prosperity?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...methods and knowledge more efficiently. Indeed parents can provide their children with...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, apart from, for example, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26572008114 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91678915066 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498985801217 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4047599179 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.222222222 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3888888889 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.366469646348 0.236089414692 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127947706206 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102565179388 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248214306903 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109586417999 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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