TPO-30 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use spec
It is incontrovertibly axiomatic that in today's modern world working has an important role in the life of most people, because having a prosperous life is not feasible without a decent and enjoyable job. Assorted approach could be implemented to specify the amount of working hours in a day and week. With this in mind, a heated controversy exists among people as to whether a decent and enjoyable job should have three working days in a week with a longer hours or five working days in a week with shorter hours. Although it is little hard to reach a consensus on this issue, I am, to great extent, on the belief that having a job with five working days and shorter hours is more enjoyable for quite a few reasons, among which, the most conspicuous ones are substantiated in the following paragraphs.
To commence, the first exquisite reason which advocate my viewpoint is that five working days with shorter hours is more beneficial for people and their families. In today's chaotic world with galloping progress of technology and global competition among various corporations, employees are absolutely under increasingly pressure during their working hours. It is stand to reason that they obviously get exhausted with a long working days and as a consequence, when they come back to home, they would not have enough energy and patience for their family members, which not only may lead to several problems in their relationship with other family members, but also would have many destructive influences on their mind and personality, which may bring about severe emotional depression. Furthermore, all people believe that their personal life and family is more important than anything else, even their work. Accordingly, with a shorter working hours in a day, individuals certainly are more energetic and can get home earlier, so they would have more time to enjoy their personal life, chat with their family members, and also they can go to downtown for having dinner in an excellent restaurant with their family. Therefore, by having this approach in our job, we would have more chances to be prosperous in both our personal life and job.
Alongside the above reason elaborated above, the fact that more working hours in a day bring about less efficiency and accuracy in work is another point which requires meticulous attention. It is confirmed that during a long hours working, individuals become exhausted and consequently, their accuracy would decrease considerably. Accordingly, the probability of making mistakes increases significantly, which may have a irreparable consequences in their work, even leading to get fired from their job. However, with a shorter working time, individuals can effectively concentrate on their work and do their best with a high level of energy. Another concomitant efficacy of working five days a week has to do with psychological issues, according to that, with this approach employees have more sense of self-satisfaction resulted from an appropriate and efficient balance between their working times and free times.
Last but not least, the noteworthy interesting research conducted in my country, Iran, illustrates that 90 percent of the employees working only seven hours a days with five working days in a week, have a high level of mental and physical health, in addition, the probability of getting promotion in their job is significantly more than other employees, due to devoting all of their attention and concentration to the job. Hence, these worthwhile statistics throw some light on the point that working shorter hours in a day has worthwhile influences on the performance and the morale of employees, which bring for them both contentment and prosperity.
Drawing upon the reasons, although there are some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree that the benefits of working five days in a week with shorter hours take precedence over those of working three days a week with longer hours. To recapitulate the reasons, not only do the agreed approach has more benefit for people in their relationship with their families, but also can guarantee their success in their job. Consequently, I strongly recommend that people consider this factors in accepting job offers.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
... heated controversy exists among people as to whether a decent and enjoyable job should have ...
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...increases significantly, which may have a irreparable consequences in their work,...
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Suggestion: consequence
...ificantly, which may have a irreparable consequences in their work, even leading to get fire...
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Suggestion: a day; days
... the employees working only seven hours a days with five working days in a week, have ...
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...ion and concentration to the job. Hence, these worthwhile statistics throw some l...
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...al rule, I do agree that the benefits of working five days in a week with shorter...
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...r this factors in accepting job offers.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, while, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 100.0 52.1666666667 192% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3573.0 1977.66487455 181% => OK
No of words: 690.0 407.700716846 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17826086957 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.12521717326 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87543865315 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 300.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434782608696 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1094.4 618.680645161 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.414974436 48.9658058833 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.65 100.406767564 178% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5 20.6045352989 167% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377118737227 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149177590459 0.076458572812 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822978286395 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272818238817 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0590388294688 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 11.7677419355 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.97 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 10.1575268817 163% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.36 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 152.0 86.8835125448 175% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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