TPO 32 Writing Independent
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole
In the modern era, a society consists of people with different roles. Some are authorities, some are those who obey. The construction of most societies and governments is viewed in a way that the decisions and plans are made by the most high-ranked authorities and other organizations and people are in charge of implementing and obeying the rules. This would cause several people, especially young people to think that they can't have any influence on the important decisions that determine the future of their society while others hold exactly the opposite view. From my vantage point, young people could have conspicuous effects on the future of their society. In the following paragraphs, the most significant reasons will be explained.
The first aspect to point out is the success of a country is mostly related to the country's people, its government and workforce. If a country has a large population of the adept workforce, its industry will thrive and would become independent from other countries for supplying its need. Therefore, young people could be considered the wealth of a country. Those are the very people who are going to be the decision makers, run the wheels of the society, be doctors and teachers who provide knowledge and health and be those who implement the rules. If these people are responsible and deft, without a shadow of doubt, the country is governed perfectly and is successful. On the other hand, if the majority of the young generation of a country tend to be lazy or spend time on doing useless things, the country would definitely tackle with crimes and economic crises and would become dependent on other countries. In many countries in the world which are under control of other countries, one of the major factors of the dependence is that such countries lack having capable people for governing the country. Had the countries had more knowledgeable and tactful young people, their fate would be different from what we observe now. But, these countries lack young educated people to make the necessary decisions and execute them to change their future.
Furthermore, young people can cause dramatic changes in the future of their country. As we know many revolutions and changes are held by young people. Young people are ambitious and think beyond the boundaries of their minds. They want a perfect society and perfect lives for whole and don't fear from change. Even, they may put their lives in danger to save their country's future. Taking a look at many revolutions in the world, most of them are held by young people who dare to express their plans and ideas, unlike other ages which may act conservatively and prefer to stay in the steady and consistent state. A good example is slavery abolishment in which several young people had an influential role to make it happen.
To recapitulate, all aforementioned reasons lead us to the fact that nowadays young people can have a dramatic impact on their society. They are ambitious and tenacious than anyone else and this would cause them to become the most influential range of society which can bring about the success of a country. It is highly recommended that if a country wants to guarantee its success, it devotes its budget to train knowledgeable and wise workforces and pay more attention to its young generation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 426, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ecially young people to think that they cant have any influence on the important dec...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...society and perfect lives for whole and dont fear from change. Even, they may put th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, therefore, while, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2772.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97666068223 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67627723352 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464991023339 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2176460187 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.88 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.28 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.16 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180915908874 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603048303296 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052423005121 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127731837504 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718579700702 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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