TPO 37- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this modern era, people live in a hectic and busy schedule with their career. Some people believe that a person who are constantly busy they become unproductive. In my humble opinion, I agree that people who have a lot on their plate can do only little things. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, today individual are always evolving and changing and work tends to be more busier than before. Many work loads are pilled up at their jobs and deadlines needs to be finished ahead of time. As a result, the outcome of their job becomes mediocre. For instance, my friend Arizona works in local coffee shop in our home town, her boss gives her many task and she cannot do the job properly because it get easily pilled up with many job one thing into another thing. As a result, Arizona is always in hurry to finish the work and her work suffered the most because she has many things she needs to accomplish, the quality and quantity of her work becomes inefficient.
Secondly, people are doing so many stuff all together they usually get stressed easily. In other words, they cannot concentrate and do their job efficiently. For example, when I was in my 3rd year in college and on my subject for anatomy class I was so overwhelmed with the information and body structure I need to memorize. I panicked and stress out because we will be having our midterm exam. I was not able to prepare and study effectively because there a lot of things going on in my mind and I did not know where to start my review. Moreover, when it is time to take the test I cannot answer correctly due to lack of preparation. Moreover, I did not pass the exam and only got 60% score. All in all, when people are too busy on doing many things they cannot do it properly because they are preoccupied with the stuff they need to finish.
To summarize, I believe that people will not be productive when they are engage in other things. This is because they attention is not focused on only one thing and their work are compromised because the end result of it will be failure.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 86, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'busier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: busier
...lving and changing and work tends to be more busier than before. Many work loads are pilled...
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Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun task seems to be countable; consider using: 'many tasks'.
Suggestion: many tasks
...op in our home town, her boss gives her many task and she cannot do the job properly beca...
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Line 3, column 413, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gets'?
Suggestion: gets
...e cannot do the job properly because it get easily pilled up with many job one thin...
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Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'many jobs'.
Suggestion: many jobs
...ly because it get easily pilled up with many job one thing into another thing. As a resu...
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Line 3, column 648, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... accomplish, the quality and quantity of her work becomes inefficient. Second...
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Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun stuff seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much stuff', 'a good deal of stuff'.
Suggestion: much stuff; a good deal of stuff
...ient. Secondly, people are doing so many stuff all together they usually get stressed ...
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Line 5, column 636, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...r correctly due to lack of preparation. Moreover, I did not pass the exam and only got 6...
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Line 7, column 74, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'engaged'.
Suggestion: engaged
...le will not be productive when they are engage in other things. This is because they a...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, moreover, second, secondly, so, another thing, for example, for instance, i feel, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1731.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4498714653 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37941311733 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498714652956 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.341853254 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1052631579 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4736842105 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84210526316 5.45110844103 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248824036316 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782975893372 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773347911256 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152041516576 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056576416506 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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