TPO 37
Do you agree or disagree with the following statements? Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
There is no shortage of opinion on efficiency of individuals' performance. In my opinion, performing many diverse matters affect the doing process and things inadequately. I feel this way for two main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly, people scatters their focus to the various things when they do different things. Moreover, scattered focus makes performers less effective because they are not capable of concentrating on things appropriately, which makes their work inadequate. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. Last year, I was preparing for the general test of Mongolian universities be rehearsing three main subjects. When I start rehearsing the topics, I was practicing all subjects everyday, which means I scattered my focus to the three lessons. Afterwards, I realized that my performance was insufficient and could not experienced any improvement for a month. Eventually, I started fussing over subjects one by one regarding the day without studying two matters simultaneously, then I improved my studying largely because I could concentrate on subject. In conclusion, people lose their opportunity to accomplish things, when they try to perform various things, because they scatter their concentration.
Secondly, individuals feel as they have lot of things to do when they attempt to achieve different things. Thereby, they feel lost and lose commitment in light of extent of work should be done, which diminishes the quality and prolongs the duration of a job. My personal experience is compelling example of this. The last session, I was studying five subjects everyday, and having problem associated with my studying manner. I did not want to study because I dread learning different topics everyday, which is the reason why I started doing only one main thing everyday. As soon as I changed my way to study, I comprehended the topics readily because I could learn in a calm and ambitious manner. Drawing from my own experience, doing many things simultaneously poses anxiousness, which makes people less aspiring, and makes the working process of low quality.
To sum up, individuals completing less number of things successfully because they attempt to complete many things. This is because they lose concentration and commitment while trying to perform diverse things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e topics, I was practicing all subjects everyday, which means I scattered my focus to th...
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Line 3, column 678, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'experience'
Suggestion: experience
...formance was insufficient and could not experienced any improvement for a month. Eventually...
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Line 5, column 361, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...t session, I was studying five subjects everyday, and having problem associated with my ...
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Line 5, column 492, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...cause I dread learning different topics everyday, which is the reason why I started doin...
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Line 5, column 562, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...why I started doing only one main thing everyday. As soon as I changed my way to study, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, while, i feel, in conclusion, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 379.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37203166227 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07217160751 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519788918206 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8607288416 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.8 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.95 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215463454432 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073996923994 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0867109650585 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144257040624 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440140895088 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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