The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities As a result the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries Do you think this

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The administrators of a university are revising their budget and have decided to change their funding priorities. As a result, the university will now spend more money on sports and athletic facilities than they do on the campus libraries. Do you think this is a good idea? Why or why not?

This type of important decision may influence students’ and even university’s situation. Personally, I believe that this is an inefficient and improper choice. I have three rationales for holding this opinion, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin with, developing the condition of library can be beneficial for the main body of students but not only sport players. Most students of educational organizations will use library in order to learn lesson and prepare for exams. On the other hand, number of individuals who play sport cannot exceed the number of people using the library. Therefore, the decision will be beneficial for a few numbers of learners. As a result, university is only going to provide few pupils with the fine condition of sports hall by ignoring the large body of students who are going to study.

Secondly, public libraries tend to be fewer than sports hall, which signifies that students are available to go to other places in order to find athletics facilities but not library. In many places including my hometown, there are insufficient number of public educational places. However, there are enormous extent of sports hall in these towns. Moreover, some schools offer their sports hall to other people who do not enroll classes at their school. Thereby, pupils can find additional places of doing exercises and playing sports although the circumstance of athletics at their university is impoverished. By contrast, they cannot find another location of studying if their university cannot provide satisfactory university.

Finally, most students and their parents make their choices about their future education institutions by mostly allowing for studying condition, which means the university with poor library cannot attract undergraduates. Getting freshman is significant step of life for individuals, so they will deduct their decision by pondering about the situation in the campus. Needless to say, they will probably take a look at the condition of library before recognizing the athletics facility. For example, last year, I decided to study in the National University of Mongolia since their library is the best in my country. If the university has not adequate library, young adults will simply enroll classes at other universities which has fine educational places. Consequently, the university will decrease their ability to attract new students by virtue of their inappropriate decision.

In summation, I am of the opinion of that this policy is truly inefficient for students and the institution itself. This is because small body of individuals will utilize athletics facility, students can find sports hall at another places if it is necessary. Furthermore, the university will lose their opportunity to earn large extent of money because people will change their decision to study there after taking a look at the library.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2461.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 457.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38512035011 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90701351203 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490153172867 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6139106066 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8695652174 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21739130435 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322191102286 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0935926987328 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576396845615 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178480538871 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0701772942612 0.0645574589148 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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