TPO 39 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the past, people has only few choices in choosing a career, whereas today individual has the luxury to chose which job is fitting to her personality and liking. Some people believe that in the past it is easier to know what career would lead to secure and successful future. In my humble opinion, I think that folks in past generation has difficulties to chose a career that will give them greener pasture. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
First of all, in the earlier generation individual has difficult lifestyle and it is hard for them to earn a living. They are only given couple of options for career such as agriculture and business and at that time growing crops and having successful business in unfavorable. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, my grandfather is a farmer and planting crops and harvesting it is crucial because they don't know if their yield will be successful or not. Majority of their harvest is a failure due to advancement in technology are not yet invented at their time. As a result, their farm lands are being infested by insects and pest which destroys their crops and they have no means to eradicate the pest, so only few crops are sold to the market and few profits are earned by the farmers. This illustrates that people in the past has only limited option with their career and having successful career is difficult to achieve.
Secondly, school education in the past are not given attention by the people. This is because school education are only for the rich and wealthy person. In addition, studying in school in the past are not diverse in contrast to today's education system where in primary school students will be prepared and educated to their future career. For instance, my grandfather only finished his sophomore year because he has no capability to fund himself to finish his college education. It is unfortunate that some of the people in my grandfather's generation suffer the same condition as he experienced. He did not have the opportunity to build a successful career because my grandfather don't have a good education. Moreover, he only knew to farm his land and harvest crop and it's very difficult at their time to harvest many crops and gain a lot of profit from it.
To summarize, I believe that in the earlier generation people has limited opportunity to build a successful career. This is because the chance to have a good job is difficult to achieve. Also, school education is very expensive and they can only have jobs that are low paying.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, whereas, as to, for instance, i feel, i think, in addition, in contrast, such as, as a result, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2135.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75501113586 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65325399222 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449888641425 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1672199693 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.45 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114528803247 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443597549293 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607723662353 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867587765777 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547488619798 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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