TPO-47 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In todays life,it is univetable to not be aware of events taking palces in parts of the world. We are all in touch with newspapers,televisions and social networks were the news scatter as easy as pie. Some people thinks being aware of what is happening inside today's world episodes it crucial in human life,while other disagree with it. In my view, i believe that it is necessary for us to be aware and catious of what is happning in other continet of the world which I will explain the reasons hereunder.
First, if we know the events about past and present we can learn from them and also prepare ourselevs for in countering such a situtions namely, wars,shoratge. For instance, ISIS is great demonstration of knwing the events. when first ISIS started invasion to other countries if other counties were unaware of such a group,not only they were not prepare to netural the incursion but also they would had a great loss of people, towns and culutre. As a result they would be unable to protect their county and help other counties to prevent this group from decimation of culture,towns and also raping incence women. As we can inference, being aware always helps us to be weary, catuois and making the best choice.
Second, there is an excellent verse by one of my countries best peot "hafez" which he says "humans are a part of each other, if an organ is in pain, the other ones are also in pain too". I believe that if we are knowlegeable on what's happing around us, we can give each other a hand in the hard times and also, pave the way as much as we can in the hardships. Taking the example of current days earthquakes in my country, were people from all over th world sent help to the people that this disaster happens to them,like sending them money to built their house, the cloth to wear in the cold weather and substenance they need to live on. By thinking about the assertion belive and the sense of humanity I calim that it is a vital role of all humankinds to help each other in the hard time and this is only possible if we get to know the occurness happening in universe.
Eventually,people should try to compete with each other in order to get improved. Being aware of other countries sophestications and new achivments makes people to try for becoming better and attain more than yesterday; while being unaware of others results in stagnations. Consequently by trying for better achivements people will get better customer services and better livlihoods standards.
All in all, being aware of events of episodes happening in the world will provides us a great benifits like those mentioned above and improve the quality of humans and the sense of humanity and precautions which are the essential factors for having a world of better.
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...aware of others results in stagnations. Consequently by trying for better achivements people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, second, so, while, for instance, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2290.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7022587269 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77230815042 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498973305955 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 720.9 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.5289413961 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.705882353 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.6470588235 20.6045352989 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107224893686 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0402820269175 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359806892094 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0681214754901 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036368534644 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.