TPO 49. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily.
Finding a friend is one of the most important needs in human. From the very young ages people tend to find friend for themselves. Many people believe that ability to make many new friends easily is more important for happiness. However, I am of the oppinion that it is better to have the ability to maintain your current friendships even you have limited number of friends. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my view point.
To begin with, there is no doubt that human is in need to find friends, however, the point is that how deepen these fiendships are? In the modern life we have nowadays, it is hard to keep friendships tight. Therefore, the ability to maintain our strings with friends plays an important role. When friendships last for long time they tend to be more deep and harder to seperate. We always need one or two friend to tell them all of our secrets and ask their help when we are in trouble. These kind of friendship are only possible if we have the ability to maintain them and make them stronger.
Moreover, by making each new friend, we should decrease the time we spent with others, in order to dedicate part of our time to that new friend. As a result, quality of friendships will be reduced and we have to devide our time between our huge circle of friends. As a matter of fact, it is easy to make many new friends, while the real challenge is keeping them as a friend over a long period of time. My friend's experiencen demonstrate this concept. My friend, Ali, is very social and he is very skilful in finding new friends. He knows almost every body in the university, however, none of his friendships are deep. He just interact them with simple talks about classes and university, but he doesn't have a single close friend to talk about his feelings and concerns, and he is deppressed most of the time. This is due to the fact that he hasn't tried to improve his ability to maintain the friendships. Had he tried to deepen his friendship, He would have been much happier.
As a conclusion, I firmly believe that having a few number of close friends is more important that making new friends. This is mainly because, we can tell our concerns and secrets only to our close friends and we can improve quality of our friendships when they are limited.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 405, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'friend' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'friends'.
Suggestion: friends
... to seperate. We always need one or two friend to tell them all of our secrets and ask...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'These kinds'?
Suggestion: This kind; These kinds
... ask their help when we are in trouble. These kind of friendship are only possible if we h...
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Line 9, column 388, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...is keeping them as a friend over a long period of time. My friends experiencen demonstrate thi...
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Line 9, column 697, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ks about classes and university, but he doesnt have a single close friend to talk abou...
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Line 9, column 843, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hasn't
...e time. This is due to the fact that he hasnt tried to improve his ability to maintai...
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Line 13, column 49, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...clusion, I firmly believe that having a few number of close friends is more important that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, kind of, no doubt, as a matter of fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1909.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 420.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54523809524 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45482887535 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469047619048 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3663118247 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7727272727 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0909090909 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294328682165 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0967634033856 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828593732811 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193030356757 0.150856017488 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0577363960491 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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