TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends
Our friends have an influential and dubious impact in our lives. Genuinely, they are be able to change our destiny. Although the plethora of people hold the opinion that the capability of maintaining a few close friends for a long time is more beneficial, others disagree with this point of view and believe that individuals who are be able to make new friends easily, will gain more profit(U), and they are happier in their lives. I, to a great extent, hold this viewpoint that human beings who are friend with a small group of people for a long time, will enjoy their lives more than the others. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.
The first reason that juts out of my mind easily at the first moment of thinking about this issue is the fact that after a long period of time, friends become familiar with each other’s personality. Therefore, all members of small groups have the same characters. Hence, when they spend their free time with each other, they enjoy the same activities such as watching a movie, doing some exercises and so forth, and as a result, they will never argue with each other. To give a tangible example, consider two men who have been friends for 12 years. Definitely, after this period of time, each of them is completely aware of the other’s tastes and never opposes them. Therefore, they would have an enjoyable time with each other. As it is clear, continuing friendship with a few people is more lucrative.
The second and equally exquisite proof for this assertion is about this importance that close friends always make an attempt to help each other in the problems. In such groups, if one of them have a difficulty others will help him and try to find a perfect solution for his problem. Some people may believe that in such situations, having the ability of making many friends is more helpful. Although this point of view is true, people with this opinion should consider the fact that close friends are more reliable thanks to the fact that they have known each other for a long time. To cast more light on this matter, a research conducted by some scientists in my country has shown that your close friends are the best consulter and always guide you toward progress. Therefore, having this kind of friends is more profitable.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that it can be more advantages for a person if he has an ability to retain his close friend for a long period of time. This contention is due to the fact that not only such friends have similar characteristics but also they are very indulgent. Consequently, it is recommended that keep your close friends as much as it is possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, if, may, second, so, therefore, kind of, such as, as a result, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2320.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71544715447 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53009514699 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473577235772 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.4634658309 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.476190476 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4285714286 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275736448209 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0885390238397 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706149492568 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179870285682 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199318843311 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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