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tpo 5

nowadays, the society is changing rapidly. because of the fast growing technology, new machines and stuffs have biult. by using new technolgy we can build exordinary tools and machines for serving people in different ways. but how we use from these new machines is depend on us. we can use them in promoting our career or we can use them only for fun. most of the people chose the latter. i want to explain that.
for example, new smartphones have many applications and these applications have spesific properties. many of them are about the science, and many of them are about the games. so, i can say, smartphones not only can be useful but also can be entertaining. most of the people choose the entertainment side. they spend more time on playing with their smartphones. i think, easy accesible to this kind of stuffs causes spending more time on personal enjoynment. we have to avoid it.
secondly, in my opinion, because of lacking plans in our lives, we waste more of our free time on this kind of unnecessery activity. i have a friend and she is a very fruitful person. she is very busy during the week, but she also do every thing that she likes in the weekend. she has a plan for all the weekend. she use plan for eliminating the unnecessery activities during the week. she trys so hard for her goals in life. So, by dividing our times and doing special activity in each time we can avoid wasting our time.
in a nutshell, i think, people have to control their activity during a day. new games, new board games and other entertaining things are veryinteresting, but we have to do our career.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 288.0 407.700716846 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57291666667 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63866729698 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517361111111 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 421.2 618.680645161 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.9390206938 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.2608695652 100.406767564 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.5217391304 20.6045352989 61% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.52173913043 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.5376344086 542% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.4 11.7677419355 54% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.34 10.9000537634 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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