TPO 5: Agree or disagree : People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - Doing things they like to do - rather than doing things they should do.
The argument above asserts that today people prefer to have enjoy than doing essential works. A simple recognition of the argument lends our discussion to a very indispensable question of why people have more fun and joy than before? Although it is broadly based argument which cannot be summed up in a paragraph or so, we need look no further than the fact that having personal enjoyment is decisive part of our lives but we should control it. That having been mentioned, I however adhere to this belief that, people spend too much time on personal enjoyment rather than critical works which will be illustrated at length in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, the crux of the matter lies in the fact that, many people specially youngsters have not job or apt job. Nowadays youngsters have many free time because of unemployment. In simple words, they do not know how can fill their times without job opportunity. So they force to do negligible works such as personal enjoyment more than before. The fundamental question is that who should control and battle with this issue? The best answer is government. In any country in the world, government must combat unemployment annually which crippling the society specially young people. Unfortunately, there are many unemployment in the world specially in our country. The best point that fit this notion is that today youngsters prefer to go to recreation centers because it has great deal of fun and joy associated with it. Hence, it goes without saying that government should contrive some ways to prepare job opportunities for youngsters and provide them with every thing that they need to become a productive persons to their society.
Aside from unemployment which cause people doing personal enjoyment than essential works, we cannot lose our sight on the fact that, economic crisis and recession affected on jobs and people. To put it is apposite words, some economic crisis such as inflation, stagflation and embargo cannot allow people to have enough concentration on their works. People distracted by these problems and discard their important works to have personal enjoyment. For example, they prefer to travel around the world or buy luxuries cars. Therefore, as is clear there are some major problems which effect on people to leave their job and spend their times on personal enjoyment.
Admittedly, it might be argued that, some people have many works to do which cannot allow them to do personal enjoyment. The proponents of this line of argument hold that there are lots of duties that occupy most of the time so that less portion of time is left for leisure activities.
Having considered all the aforementioned points discussed above, I aver that people do leisure activities today more than before. This is because they have many free time and they do not know how to fill this time.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument above asserts that today people prefer to have enjoy than doing essential works.
Description: A verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to have and enjoy
is decisive part of our lives
is a decisive part of our lives
government must combat unemployment annually which crippling the society specially young people.
government must combat unemployment annually which is crippling the society specially young people.
government must combat unemployment annually to cripple the society specially young people.
People distracted by these problems
People are distracted by these problems
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Words: 478 while No. of Different Words: 222 //it means it is wordy
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 478 350
No. of Characters: 2341 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.676 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.897 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.559 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 81 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.783 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.647 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.391 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.491 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 61, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'enjoyed'.
Suggestion: enjoyed
...sserts that today people prefer to have enjoy than doing essential works. A simple re...
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Line 3, column 109, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'jobbed'.
Suggestion: jobbed
...ny people specially youngsters have not job or apt job. Nowadays youngsters have ma...
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Line 3, column 288, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'doing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: doing
... without job opportunity. So they force to do negligible works such as personal enjoy...
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Line 3, column 618, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun unemployment seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much unemployment', 'a good deal of unemployment'.
Suggestion: much unemployment; a good deal of unemployment
... young people. Unfortunately, there are many unemployment in the world specially in our country. ...
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Line 3, column 1020, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'person'?
Suggestion: person
...g that they need to become a productive persons to their society. Aside from unemplo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'look', 'so', 'therefore', 'for example', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.242829827916 0.229887763892 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.164435946463 0.158761421928 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0879541108987 0.0866891130778 101% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0516252390057 0.046263068375 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.057361376673 0.0685040099705 84% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130019120459 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0363288718929 0.0351676179071 103% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62744849297 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0325047801147 0.0309702414327 105% => OK
Particles: 0.0019120458891 0.00188951952338 101% => OK
Determiners: 0.0707456978967 0.0887237588012 80% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0210325047801 0.0209618222197 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0229445506692 0.0139019557991 165% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2872.0 2387.08602151 120% => OK
No of words: 478.0 408.028673835 117% => OK
Chars per words: 6.00836820084 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48200974243 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.349372384937 0.338922669872 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.232217573222 0.251872472559 92% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175732217573 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.115062761506 0.112833075102 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62744849297 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479079497908 0.524397521467 91% => OK
Word variations: 54.7522263185 59.2087087015 92% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.7826086957 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5104197469 48.84282405 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.869565217 120.699889404 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7826086957 20.5533526081 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.391304347826 0.644075263715 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 44.0043660178 45.7405998639 96% => OK
Elegance: 1.4965034965 1.45489161554 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246040721547 0.300154397459 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.120368679996 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10337219269 0.0752933317313 137% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473613105522 0.497263757937 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.149722866204 0.151897553556 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0928264031313 0.114077575197 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066823355217 0.0781384742642 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.291709256666 0.336927656856 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0726148413658 0.067059652881 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172441235718 0.210909579961 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446701412412 0.0618886996521 72% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.86379928315 233% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 8.42114695341 119% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.4623655914 284% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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