TPO 52 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's world, the society imposes a lot of rules on its members in different aspects. While some people believe that societis in modern world restricted the function of the youngsters by forcing them to obeys a variety of rules, the others hold the view that juveniles are fulling around, and there should be some rules to cramp them. Personally, I concur with the former group's viewpoint. The reasons substantiating my standpoint are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the modern world expect all of the young people to be well-educated. To elaborate, in the past, the young people find their interests and they would follow their interests and become experts on that field; however, in this modern world, juveniles should opt for a major even before they can find their interests, and should study on that majors until they get their masters or P.Hd on that major. Thus, there are a variety of cases, which they find they do not have any fondness in the major that they have studied, and it is hard for them to change their field when they are in 20s or so. Therfore, the strict rules and expectations of the society make these persons so depressed. Had not these strict rules been in the societies, the youngsters would be more happy.
In addition, in my society there is a tradition which force the juveniles to marry in their youth; on the other hand the economical problems in the society make the situation for them harder still. To elucidate, my country similar to the a variety of countries in the world face the economical issues which make the condition for the youngsters so hard, because they cannot find a job according to their field of study. Therefore, they should accept menial occupations with low wages due to they should get married as soon as possible for them, unless other people in the society will blame them.
As shown above, considering all the reasons and the points mentioned, one could conclude the society is too strict with the youngsters due to hard rules which they should follow. It is because not only should they have high academic education, but also they have to get married in younge ages with the economic problems of the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, in addition, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1852.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79792746114 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45694761571 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484455958549 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 553.5 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5613019944 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.285714286 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166628349634 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0754245168484 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523243538799 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118253896731 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442793266676 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 58.1214874552 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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