TPO 56: some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Social media play a key role in recent years and affect life styles drastically. Social-networking sites like face book and instagram are becoming more popular day by day. There is a heated controversy between two groups of people who are in favor of and who are opposed of uploading pictures in social-networking sites. Although the opposite side opinion's have rational reasons for the stand point, in my view the advantages out weigh the disadvantages. There are two main justifications for my preference which are the practicability to share experiences and the great situation to earn money via this activity.
As a threshold matter, in the complicated society we are living now, there are tons of questions everyone has in each field. Cook, makeup and immigration are some example to the subject of social networking instagram pages. There, an expert demonstrates his experience and or any investigated information to the audience. According to the captivating environment such sites have, quite a few individuals are attracted to solve their problems or have response for their questions via this stunning area. People all around the world have access to Internet, meaning that there is no boundary between people to start a conversation and share their thoughts.
Moreover, an outstanding advertising platform is provided by social network influencers. Those having more followers are suitable for business companies to invest in and cooperate for an influential advertisement. To acquire money, an intense competition is created between bloggers; therefore, creative efforts are done by each of who trying to increase her followers. It is by social-networking that some jobs are emerged. In this way not only the bloggers but also companies are satisfied by the mutual project they are involved in.
In succinct, social-networking leads to serious disputes among people. I am one of the proponents for recording experiences on these web sites on account of two reasons. The first considers sharing experiences being useful for other people and second is the financial benefits stems from this activity.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36746987952 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20272374646 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623493975904 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.386439178 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246781570179 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660395119901 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460185679539 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137076476088 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464178012437 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.48 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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