TPO21 – Independent: A/D? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
The industrial revolution has changed the fundamental basis of education. In fact, the majority of people have begun to believe that education can pave the way for further progress in one's future career. One of the heated debates in this realm is that whether studying hard in school is more crucial for success in a future job compared to the ability to relate well to people. Several aspects should be taken into account to confirm the importance of education on the success in peoples' future job. Deeply deliberating this issue, I would argue that more close relationship with people, more success in a career, however; there might be some counterexamples about this claim. Following reasons will further elaborate on this issue.
The most prominent point to be mentioned is that what someone studies during the study years are theoretical concepts, and the ability to put those theories into practice is what employers want. According to surveys, people from all around the world particularly engineers may utilize only 10 or 20 percent of their academic knowledge while they are working as professionals. Considering this fact, one way to work efficiently and practically which is necessary for a job is relating well with different people especially your colleagues. As a result, you can broaden your horizons and obtain more and more experience by socializing with someone who is expert in a similar position.
The second rationale behind my idea is rooted in the fact that, during the last decades, the modern world has encouraged many specialists to work together. In other words, nowadays, teamwork plays a significant role in many industries' success. Surprisingly, there is a close relationship even between engineers and physicians to change the world into a better one by inventing medical robots. Therefore, one may have enough knowledge of studying, but they are not capable of relating and cooperating with other people in a group. It is an undeniable fact that this person would prevent other members of a team from achieving their goal. Neither the school nor the university’s grades would not be useful if they cannot contribute to the team related to their career.
To wrap it up, based on the ideas which were presented above I highly believe that one cannot cope with issues which are presented in the real world only by studying hard in school, and in order to become successful in their future job they should be able to relate well to people. Consequently, they can be more productive and contribute to their professional team.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'industries'' or 'industry's'?
Suggestion: industries'; industry's
...amwork plays a significant role in many industries success. Surprisingly, there is a close...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, in fact, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2147.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08767772512 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81824894607 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54028436019 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 679.5 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.0429799529 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.277777778 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05555555556 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305834822074 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881650688527 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107720815253 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18990528328 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0981001036236 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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