TPO25 – Independent: A/D? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to help their communities.
In my point of view, in current lives, this fact exists which young people do not pay attention enough to their community. More they handle their tasks, less they pay attention to their society. However, it does not mean they neglect their society. they are just busy enough to perform their duty and cannot assign a distinct time to help their society. I support my idea for two reasons.
First and foremost, nowadays, people in the youth period of their life has quite a bit of complicated tasks as well as difficulties which make them confused. Since they do not have enough concentration and ability to handle both those tasks and helping society, they usually do not pay enough attention to aiding their community. For example, imagine a boy who wakes up early in the morning and works until evening, when he comes back home, there are just a few hours to rest or attend himself. this procedure repeats during the week and actually, not only is not be able to arrange to help the society, but he cannot accomplish individual schedules completely. Also, it should be considered that this person needs to allocate enough time to themselves. Every person should respect himself or herself and it is a rule which no one can run away from that. And thus, when you allocate this time to yourself, helping the society will be the last priority in your life.
Secondly, as time passes, the wishes of the people and their hopes change. In fact, in a particular period in history, perhaps, considering and helping society play the most important role in their lives, but in the current era, this ideal has changed. The youth are following their delights and pleasures. they want to enjoy more and more instead of thinking about something which does not have any meaning in their lives. As a result, they do not aid their community. one of the current greatest says: " Let young people be free. they are assets of the world that can change the future life of the human beings. so, never disturb their concentration due to something which is not crucial to them." According to this statement, it can be concluded that the worth of young people in the current era is in their creativity and activity to enhance the quality of future life. thus, it is common that parents pay more attention to train them creative than a society-lover who helping the community is his or her priority in their life.
Totally, it is worth mentioning that this route can be more efficient and effective. Although they do not help the community, in the future, they can leave some effects which really will be more interesting and important than their current help. so, in my opinion, this fact is not deniable that young people do not dedicate enough time for their communities to helping them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in fact, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74380165289 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44994629922 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47520661157 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 708.3 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.343944257 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1666666667 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95833333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286390307453 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964972205153 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828533838825 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216635762777 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296031586054 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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