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It goes without saying, Nowadays choosing satisfying jobs has a close correlation with being prosperous in life since jobs are the main source of earning money, meet needs and give rise to survive in today's sophisticated world. In this regard, some people are of the opinion that it is more beneficial for children to opt for a career based on their parent's job. In contrast, others hold the opposite point of view that youngsters should pursue different jobs. I, personally, concur with the idea that children landing work in their chosen field. I substantiate my viewpoints as follows.
To commence with, in the contemporary era job market's demands differ substantially from the era that parents lived due to emerging technology providing vast new occupation opportunities. To be more specific, in the past, professions were confined and encompassed limited jobs such as farming, some type of engineering or health profession which are well paid and gratifying on that time, however, their remarkable role became diminish gradually or the methods for conducting them have been changed considerably. On the contrary, nowadays, technologies have been expanding significantly, boom the jobs market and lead to advent new professions like IT engineering, Digital marketing, or any technology-based career. Take this into consideration, pursuing jobs the same as the family's job which demands them are decreased, gives rise to an increase in the unemployment rate.
The second worth-mentioning reasons are that selecting individuals professions should be based on their talent and interest rather than pursuing the parent's job which gives rise to achieve the optimal outcome. To delineate, be thriving in a career depend on several factors which among the, having ability in the job and enjoying from work method and environment play vital roles as an impressive incentive. In this connection, should individuals opt for their occupation according to their talent and interest, they will pave the way for remarkable progression and yield more profit in their career. Conversely, continue the parent's profession, not appealing and attractive for children could result in undergoing work pressure and inducing anxiety and hesitation leading to resign the job or poor performance at work, consequently.
To draw a conclusion, I strongly advocate the notion that it is more advantageous for children to choose different jobs from their parent's professions. This is because pursuing their parent's chosen field not only give rise to unemployment owing to advent new job opportunity and reduce demand for jobs that were in past but also this avenue of selecting a job is not based children interest or talent having resulted in weak outcome in career or even relinquish from it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 43, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to satisfy'.
Suggestion: to satisfy
... goes without saying, Nowadays choosing satisfying jobs has a close correlation with being...
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Line 1, column 541, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...t children landing work in their chosen field. I substantiate my viewpoints as follow...
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Line 3, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...wpoints as follows. To commence with, in the contemporary era job markets dema...
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Line 5, column 287, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...r depend on several factors which among the, having ability in the job and enjoying ...
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Line 5, column 628, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
... their career. Conversely, continue the parents profession, not appealing and attractiv...
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Line 8, column 199, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to field'
Suggestion: to field
...s because pursuing their parents chosen field not only give rise to unemployment owin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, conversely, however, if, second, so, well, in contrast, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37614678899 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02375704065 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55504587156 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.4187126794 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.266666667 100.406767564 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0666666667 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 10.9000537634 133% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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