TPO26- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job. Use specific reasons and examples to support you.
Some people believe that it is helpful for children to continue their parents' jobs, while others are of the opinion that, it may not be beneficial. Personally, I agree with the latter. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, it is obvious that every child has his own talents, favorites, and capabilities that may be different from their parents and these skills can help them for different future success and job opportunities. To clarify my points, children can educate more by their parents’ supports and develop their key skills, so they can face new challenges, those that their parents could not ever face. My friend's experience is a compelling example of this. When he was a child, he drew many fantastic paintings that were very special for that age. Although his parents were teachers and never had a good painting, they supported my friend to educate in this field and now he is one of the most famous painters in his country. If he had not followed his talents, he would not have achieved prosperity in his favorite field.
Secondly, in today’s world, some new jobs are needed that was not existed in the past, so the children have to deal with them for the future. To be more specific, nowadays, due to developments in technology, the job market has been changed significantly. On one hand, some jobs may be omitted or even changed in the form and style and on the other hand, some novel job opportunities with special skills requirements have been defined to the job market, so there should be some talented one that shoulders these responsibilities and can come across the new challenges. For instance, online shopping is used by many people all over the world that was not common before that. People are buying all they need from online markets from their daily requirements to even their clothes. Therefore, many new job opportunities with special skills are initiates in the job market like programming, data analyzing, styling, etc. As these job opportunities had not existed before that, so the new generation has to have these new skills.
In conclusion, I believe that it is more useful for children to choose their future job according to their own favorites, talents, and capabilities and not just continue their parents’ job. This is because, not only, they may be more talented and have developed skills compared to their previous generation but also today’s job market have new challenges and wants novel professions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90610328638 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71432971403 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485915492958 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6279953099 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.111111111 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.340058715094 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110086288038 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.086721680612 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21667950474 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0619507431894 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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