Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is the indisputable fact that in every society famous people including athletes and entertainer are the center of attention and people tend to have more information about various facets of their life comprising private or professional aspects. In this regard, some people approve of this idea that athletes deserve to have their private life without any distraction. However, others hold the opposite point of view. Personally, I concur with the former tenet. I substantiate my standpoint with some explanation as follows.
To commence with, athletes and popular entertainers are ordinary people similar to other people and entitle to have their own privacy to have tranquil mental status in order to have optimal performance. To put in the more vivid picture, the most fundamental reason giving rise to these people become famous among society is their professions and achieving victory in the competition. In this vein, people should merely concentrate on this aspect of famous people life and avoid interruption in their privacy which could have result in distraction from their main duties. Accordingly, being an interloper in their personal life and encroach their boundaries in order to acquire more information about their life, cause inducements of tremendous pressure that influence their concentration on their profession adversely and decrease their optimal performance, in the long run.
The second worth-mentioning reason that comes into my mind is that some gossip and news about the personal lives of famous people which consider private could have resulted in ruin their entire professional life. To delineate, since they are extremely successful and prosperous in their life, some people become jealous of them and incline to spread fake news or gossip about their private life such as their relationship status or their social circle. Under this circumstance, these negative rumors could have cost their profession. By the way of illustration, one of the famous soccer players accused of sexual harassment by one of his fans, and this action sabotage his career totally. Despite his exoneration of this accuse, the damage to his reputation was irrecoverable. As a result, If people respected their privacy, this conflict would not happen.
To draw a conclusion, I firmly advocate the notion that famous entertainers and athletes should have more privacy. This is because not only less privacy causes them to lose their concentration on their profession and decline in their performance, but it also could completely destroy their professional life by fake news.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, however, if, second, so, such as, as a result, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40594059406 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88464798556 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519801980198 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 693.9 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.933042805 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.470588235 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141852879844 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0640160954811 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643436369089 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112733321159 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0340329160436 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 10.9000537634 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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