TPO27-If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying
Over the past few decades, the issue of whether people should select a secure job or wainting for a satisfying job has received a great deal of attention from people and societies. Although some may argue that the occupation who bring satisfying is more benefical, I as well as many others believe that having a secure job is very significant on either people's life or their families, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, a paramount reason why it is better for people to choose a secure job is that in this competitive world having a long-life job is a important issue in every part of the life. In recent decades, the costs of the living have been augmented drastically; therefore, people should have a job which are ensured about it. In addition, as the educated people have been increased more than previous time, the opportunity to find a suitable job satisfying the people has been decreased. So, people should be aware that a secure job could guarantee their life's relief.
A further reason for this view is that lacking of a secure job could be stressful for the people. It is sometimes said that having tensions in every job might have a negative effect on the employees' performance due to the reason that they could not concentrate on their work and they would not be able to demonstrate neither their adepts nor their abilities. For instance, my father was a merchant and imported commodities from other countries to our country. Since the flactuation of the currency valution of my country was very high, he could not rely on his work incomes due to the reason that he could be settled down in every moment. Hence, he always have alot of tensions on his work.
Finally, it is occasionally said that by having a secure occupation, people can satisfy themselves on the other ways. This means that if they have a reliable job, they could have some entertainment like travel or other affairs which they are interested in. However, people can take a risk and wait until finding a more satisfying job, it should be consider that they might not be successful on this way; thus, they would lose their time for having a appropriate job.
In brief, contemplating all aforementioned reasons, I can draw the conclusion that finding a secure job is more important chiefly due to the reason that this desicion not only guarantee the life incomes but also can degrade the stress of the people on their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ecure job is very significant on either peoples life or their families, and the followi...
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Line 3, column 151, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...etitive world having a long-life job is a important issue in every part of the li...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
...job might have a negative effect on the employees performance due to the reason that they...
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Line 5, column 657, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
... down in every moment. Hence, he always have alot of tensions on his work. Final...
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Line 7, column 349, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'considered'?
Suggestion: considered
...ing a more satisfying job, it should be consider that they might not be successful on th...
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Line 7, column 449, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
..., they would lose their time for having a appropriate job. In brief, contempl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in addition, in brief, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80327868852 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67245234694 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47775175644 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.9845753389 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.733333333 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4666666667 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450311269061 0.236089414692 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.171270289438 0.076458572812 224% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101326137044 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267302592067 0.150856017488 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117498305944 0.0645574589148 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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