TPO3-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.
To meet other people is to expand our views of the world and get out of our comfort zone. This can result in new friendships that can have positive impacts on your future. Personally, I belive that is more important make news friends than to keep old friends. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, make news friends will increase your experience with differents Peoples and also will provide for you otherwise of thought. So, when you do it, you will be able to discover others cultures, habits and religions. Moreover, you will get more experience of life, because you will get different points of view. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. About four years ago, I traveled alone to Gold Coast-Australia. At the time, I was complety alone in a different country. However, after 1 week I made news friends and it was a great manner to understand differents cultures. For this reason, I increased my life experiences.
Secondly, make news friends is a good form to do a network in your career. Knows different persons could help you make news friends and also provide for you a network in your career. This is because it will increase the people that you know. For instance, when my dad was doing a observership program at Jackson Memorial Hospital in Miami, he made a friend called Jon. This man was the most influences Cardiologist in America. Consequently it my dad got a good letter of recommendation and got a goog job his home country. As a result, he has been working in the best hospital of cardiology in Brazil.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that make news friends will provide for you more benefits in your life. This is because you will get diferrents ways of thinking and because you can increase your network in career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: an
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, you know, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67601246106 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7103591495 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514018691589 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.5430805969 48.9658058833 48% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.4761904762 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2857142857 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282368699534 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0851418983128 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100682697381 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19013935725 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0232877071955 0.0645574589148 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.27 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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