TPO43
Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork, which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Spending time with your loved ones in an age where the importance of socializing and face to face communication is diminishing can be a very important thing to do. However, we should also ponder how deep our connections go and whether they are weak and unstable or strong and deeply rooted.
I firmly believe that continued exposure to communication through using leisure time for doing casual activities with children would be in the long run, more beneficial to society as a whole.
First off, helping children with their schoolwork might prove to be detrimental to their development if it is done too much. I believe that in order for somone to learn how to deal with their problems, they need to work on solving it either alone or with the help of their peers. Ergo, should a parent insist of helping their children with their schoolwork all the time, they won't develop good problem solving skills. However, this doesn't mean that parents should neglect their children when they require assistance. For example if a school related task is proving too daunting or difficult, parents should offer partial assistance. On the other hand, providing good casual time for children is a great mood booster and performance enhancer, and will result in them performing better at school.
Moreover, parents can develop a better understanding of their children through the activity of playing games with them. They can become more acquainted with the complexities of their psychology and learn to understand them better. Take a Football player for example. Through playing Football with his or her children, a Football player might learn that their child is completely uninterested in football. Therefore he will learn that he should be making life descisions that wouldn't force his child to follow in his footsteps.
Finally, playing social games in leisure time can help children develop strong mental and communication skills. For example, playing games like Charades can help children develop memory, pattern recognition and abstract thinking skills more efficiently than compared to what they learn in elementary school.
In summation, the continued development of a deep mutual bond between a parent and their child is more integral to the healthy development and growth of future generations. Therefore for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that parents should spend their free time playing games and sports with their children and developing these bonds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2078.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24747474747 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68959666329 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515151515152 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9534241384 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.444444444 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263282435971 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908057738782 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700890033736 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14765019279 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048214575649 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.