TPO46-Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, the importance of celebrities' role in our communities have been enhanced suprisingly. Regarded to the developments in media industry and also the widespread use of social networks, many people are following the celebrities' life and try to come after their lifestyles, clothes and even their opinions. Among these people, young people are more influenced by celebrities' activities and many of teenagers think of them as role models, mainly because of following reasons.
First of all, the young people spend more time in social medias and the posibility of accosting celebrities' advertisements is higher in them. For instance, suppose a teenager girl spending most of her spare time in instagram. she will face many posts by celebrities published by her followers and also in explore part of the instagram showing last news about celebrities' life. it is obvious that she will be influenced by that much infromation and follows some information about her favourite idol further. Cosequently, spending too much time about someone's lifestyle will make her more influenced by that person's actions.
Moreover, young people have less experience in life. they believe many thing they watch without thinking whether it is all the story or some points have been filtered to attract more viewers. many celebrities publish posts about the bright side of their life such as wealth, enjoyments and hobbies. But most of the viewers do not know about their problems and maybe failures in life. Since younger people have more desire for ideality in their life, they get traped more often in the attractive part of their idol's lifestyle.
Aditionally, older people are aware of these strategies to attract people and do not get deceived easily. Besides, their time is more valuable to older people than is to teenagers. they have more respect for the family and prefer to spend their time on something more serious and worth than some repetitive fancy stories.
Taking all these into account, young people waste too much time on pointless activities that in future may regret it. life is not a childish story in which we obtain everything without making any efforts. these stories are just being made in order to distract us from serious aspects of life which we should focus on. Once we notice the value of our limited time in life, we will stop following these useless information and it will a big step in the way of becoming mature and responsible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 222, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...networks, many people are following the celebrities life and try to come after their lifest...
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Line 7, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: She
...ng most of her spare time in instagram. she will face many posts by celebrities pub...
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Line 7, column 378, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...owing last news about celebrities life. it is obvious that she will be influenced ...
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Line 13, column 54, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...ng people have less experience in life. they believe many thing they watch without t...
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Line 13, column 67, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...e less experience in life. they believe many thing they watch without thinking whether it ...
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Line 13, column 193, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Many
... been filtered to attract more viewers. many celebrities publish posts about the bri...
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Line 19, column 182, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e to older people than is to teenagers. they have more respect for the family and pr...
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Line 19, column 281, Rule ID: WORTH_THAN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worse', the comparative of 'bad'?
Suggestion: worse
...heir time on something more serious and worth than some repetitive fancy stories. ...
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Line 25, column 206, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: These
... everything without making any efforts. these stories are just being made in order to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13118811881 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63087374592 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524752475248 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4292332275 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.65 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139142608877 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487173598504 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0400224323744 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0880804756815 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517012698984 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.