The twentieth century saw great changes. In your opinion, what is one change that should be remembered about the twentieth century? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
There were many important changes, both technological and cultural, during the twentieth century. In my opinion, the most important of these are the advances that were made in medical science. The development of vaccines and antibiotics, increased access to health care, and improvements in surgical techniques are all things that improved, and saved, the lives of people all around the world.
Vaccines and antibiotics have save the lives of many people. Until the middle of twentieth century, many people became crippled or died from polio. Now the polio vaccine is available everywhere. In the past, people could die from even simple infections. Now penicillin and other antibiotics make it east to cure infections.
Increased access to health care has also improved the lives of millions of people. In the past, many people lived far from hospitals and clinics. Now hospitals, clinics, and health centers have been built in many parts of the world. More people have the opportunity to visit a doctor or nurse before they become very sick. They can be treated more easily. They are sick less, and this leads to a better quality of life.
Improved surgical techniques make it easier to treat many medical problems. Microscopic and laser surgery techniques are more efficient than older methods. It is easier for doctor to perform them, and easier for patient to recover. Surgery patients can return to their normal lives more quickly now than they could in the past.
Every body needs good health in oder to have a good quality of life. Advances in medical science have improved the lives of people all around the world. They are improvements that are important to everyone.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 43.0788530466 37% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 277.0 407.700716846 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07581227437 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54104442618 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505415162455 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.8034639224 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.9523809524 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.1904761905 20.6045352989 64% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.28571428571 5.45110844103 24% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0259135616993 0.236089414692 11% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00893914537325 0.076458572812 12% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192829019612 0.0737576698707 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0156814213205 0.150856017488 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163926202587 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.3 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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