At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Social activities and sports are vital in students life as classes and libraries are, so they must receive the same financial support to keep the students active and engage with the university activities. I think this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, student life is very stressful, they have to spend most of the time at libraries doing projects and other assignments. Most of the time they do not have places to recreate themselves either because the university does not offer places to do it or because they have to travel outside the campus to find those places. Universities should create places where the students can socialize and enjoy, such as a clubhouse, painting classes, music and art classes, and so on. As the university invests in libraries and academic classes, they also should spend money providing entertainment activities to their students. This not also benefit the students, but also the universities since this will improve the student's performance at the end of the year. About ten years ago, when I was in university, I used to go to music classes to get distracted from my regular routine and make new friends. I really learn to get rid of my stress and at the end of the semester, I got the best grade of my class.
Secondly, universities should spend money not only on academic things, also, students need other activities to enhance their performance in classes. Sports is an excellent option to be financially supported by universities. For example there are many campus that does not have a gym or soccer field. Many students get frustrated because they do not have where practice any sport, so I think this is an important aspect that universities must to consider. My son is a professional soccer player. Last year he was selected by Rutgers University to study his career there because his they need a good soccer player for their team. When he visited the school for first time the Dean told him that they have to travel outside the campus to practice because the schools does not have a field to practice. My son was vey disappoint and he left the school.
Finally, universities should spend money in social actives and sports, and not only in libraries and classes. Each one have benefit for the students performance and could be of great importance in the final result in the students life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1965.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81617647059 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65357653472 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485294117647 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.2685709188 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.421052632 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4736842105 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243955802612 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796623846556 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0891420360793 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179336084005 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602807702104 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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