At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
Without any shadow of doubt, people are the corner stone of any successful society; indeed, the more individuals of a country is qualified, the more the country is powerful. In this regard, education play a vital role in preparing ones for the future. Given the existing educational system, scheduling the budget of universities is one of the pivotal concerns of any university principal, for the budget allocated to universities is often limited, especially in my country. With this in mind, some believe that the budget of sports and social activities need to be as equal as classes and libraries, while others hold the opposite view. I personally subscribe with the first attitude for quite a few reason, three of the most important are discussed below.
The most crucial point is that students need to other activities besides studying, which influence students in an indispensable manner. In the universities, the purpose of which are studying, competition and jealousy make the atmosphere of the colleges intolerable. Allocating a specific time for sports and social activities not only make universities more intriguing, but also provide stimulation for students to study and hard work.
Another interpretation as to why I do not concur with the latter perspective in the introductory paragraph lies in the fact that a healthy nation is a wealthy nation. There a great deal of prescription regarding so as to be healthy such as diet, avoiding from stress and smoke, and physical and mental activities. It seems to me that physical activities has a pivotal role in being healthy. Unfortunately, nowadays, increasing popularity of computers, videos, and other state-of-the-art technologies make students more inactive and lonely in comparison to the past; as a result, they are more exposed to diseases. Getting access to the appropriate level of social activities and sports in the universities enhances student’s mental and physical health. There is a renowned persian proverb, the equivalent of it in the English may sound like this, “healthy body is a prerequisite for healthy mind", which is indicative of the importance of sports in the life of human beings.
Last but not least, sports and social activities develop sense of team-spirit and unity in students. For instance, when playing hockey or soccer, they learn how to play and work with team, which develops the sense of team-spirit, building the strong relationship with others.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all of the aforementioned ingredients discussed above, I do endorse my point of view that sports and social activities and classes and libraries should enjoy the same financial support on the grounds that sports and social activities develop the sense of friendliness and team-spirit in students, motivate them to be better in their studies, and enhance their mental and physical health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'few reasons'.
Suggestion: few reasons
...ibe with the first attitude for quite a few reason, three of the most important are discus...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an indispensable manner" with adverb for "indispensable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ides studying, which influence students in an indispensable manner. In the universities, the purpose of wh...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... a great deal of prescription regarding so as to be healthy such as diet, avoiding from ...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'if', 'may', 'regarding', 'so', 'while', 'as to', 'for instance', 'such as', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246628131021 0.229887763892 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.125240847784 0.158761421928 79% => OK
Adjectives: 0.113680154143 0.0866891130778 131% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0385356454721 0.046263068375 83% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0269749518304 0.0685040099705 39% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132947976879 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0346820809249 0.0351676179071 99% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.08492970452 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0250481695568 0.0309702414327 81% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.107899807322 0.0887237588012 122% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00385356454721 0.0209618222197 18% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0154142581888 0.0139019557991 111% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2892.0 2387.08602151 121% => OK
No of words: 461.0 408.028673835 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.27331887202 5.86048508987 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48200974243 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.407809110629 0.338922669872 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.323210412148 0.251872472559 128% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.232104121475 0.174417080927 133% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.17136659436 0.112833075102 152% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08492970452 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522776572668 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 61.0148772827 59.2087087015 103% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6684587814 82% => OK
Sentence length: 27.1176470588 20.5533526081 132% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.3817808318 48.84282405 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.117647059 120.699889404 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1176470588 20.5533526081 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.764705882353 0.644075263715 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 59.4386882736 45.7405998639 130% => OK
Elegance: 2.17171717172 1.45489161554 149% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2813601943 0.300154397459 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.107425017964 0.103427244359 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0491124272099 0.0752933317313 65% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.593282961557 0.497263757937 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156082049177 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13928457606 0.114077575197 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135222553484 0.0781384742642 173% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.416284216388 0.336927656856 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0607401279862 0.067059652881 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220340392821 0.210909579961 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0836064273152 0.0618886996521 135% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.6433691756 103% => OK
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30