At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
The is no doubt that university plays an crucial role in students skills, information and future career. Although some people, if asked, would agree that university should spend their funds on improving classes and updating libraries, university should spend equal amount of money on activities like sports and social events as well as class and library updates. The basis for my views is health, skills and entertainment reasons.
Being healthy is the ultimate goal for all of the students. Spending money on buliding sports facilities like gyms, swimming pools, and sports fields, could have a tandled effect on students health in both mentaly and physically way. For example, with availability of sports buildings and fields sutudent are encouraged to exercise and play soccer ball, basket ball. However, some people argue that those sports building and activites could effect student overall education process on the premise that sports activities might divert students attentions from their studies. A study has been conducted at The University Of California indicated that students, in fact, focus more on their studies at the Universities where sports facilites are available.
In addition to being healthy, developing various skills is another aspect that makes me agree that university should spend equal amount of money on sports and social activities. Sports helps students to work as a team, they elso encourage the students to communicate with each other more effeciently. Because the transitional period between High School and university, most of the students have difficultyies communicate with their peers. However, involving the students in sport team like foot ball team, volyball or at social activities like group disscussion, not only encourage the to communicate with their studymates, but also help the students to learn the basic team work skills. If sports activities and social activities were neglected, Students might miss a great chance to participate and learn such great skills.
As a conclusion, we can safely say that without university support to both sport and social activities, students may neglect their health, have dificultuies dealing with people or work with a group, which I found that the university should be responsible to help students in such a matter as well as it help them in their studies.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The is no doubt that university plays an crucial role in students skills, information and future career.
Description: The tag an article is not usually followed by is
Suggestion: Refer to The and is
activites could effect student
activites could affect student
it help them in their studies.
it helps them in their studies.
Sentence: However, involving the students in sport team like foot ball team, volyball or at social activities like group disscussion, not only encourage the to communicate with their studymates, but also help the students to learn the basic team work skills.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by an infinitival to
Suggestion: Refer to the and to
Sentence: Spending money on buliding sports facilities like gyms, swimming pools, and sports fields, could have a tandled effect on students health in both mentaly and physically way.
Error: tandled Suggestion: tangled
Error: mentaly Suggestion: mental
Error: buliding Suggestion: building
Sentence: For example, with availability of sports buildings and fields sutudent are encouraged to exercise and play soccer ball, basket ball.
Error: sutudent Suggestion: student
Sentence: However, some people argue that those sports building and activites could effect student overall education process on the premise that sports activities might divert students attentions from their studies.
Error: activites Suggestion: activities
Sentence: A study has been conducted at The University Of California indicated that students, in fact, focus more on their studies at the Universities where sports facilites are available.
Error: facilites Suggestion: facilities
Sentence: Sports helps students to work as a team, they elso encourage the students to communicate with each other more effeciently.
Error: effeciently Suggestion: efficiently
Error: elso Suggestion: else
Sentence: Because the transitional period between High School and university, most of the students have difficultyies communicate with their peers.
Error: difficultyies Suggestion: difficulties
Sentence: However, involving the students in sport team like foot ball team, volyball or at social activities like group disscussion, not only encourage the to communicate with their studymates, but also help the students to learn the basic team work skills.
Error: disscussion Suggestion: discussion
Error: volyball Suggestion: vocal
Error: studymates Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: As a conclusion, we can safely say that without university support to both sport and social activities, students may neglect their health, have dificultuies dealing with people or work with a group, which I found that the university should be responsible to help students in such a matter as well as it help them in their studies.
Error: dificultuies Suggestion: difficulties
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 22 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 368 350
No. of Characters: 1933 1500
No. of Different Words: 195 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.38 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.253 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.65 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.091 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.643 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.381 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 39, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
The is no doubt that university plays an crucial role in students skills, inform...
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Line 3, column 40, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... Being healthy is the ultimate goal for all of the students. Spending money on buliding sp...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
... fields, could have a tandled effect on students health in both mentaly and physically ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts health in both mentaly and physically way. For example, with availability of s...
^^
Line 3, column 321, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dings and fields sutudent are encouraged to exercise and play soccer ball, basket...
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Line 3, column 445, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ose sports building and activites could effect student overall education process on th...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 563, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ocial activities like group disscussion, not only encourage the to communicate w...
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Line 5, column 587, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oup disscussion, not only encourage the to communicate with their studymates, bu...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'well', 'for example', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'no doubt', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.314496314496 0.229887763892 137% => OK
Verbs: 0.140049140049 0.158761421928 88% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0687960687961 0.0866891130778 79% => OK
Adverbs: 0.031941031941 0.046263068375 69% => OK
Pronouns: 0.034398034398 0.0685040099705 50% => OK
Prepositions: 0.132678132678 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.034398034398 0.0351676179071 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72899695596 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.022113022113 0.0309702414327 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => More particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0786240786241 0.0887237588012 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.027027027027 0.0209618222197 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00982800982801 0.0139019557991 71% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2358.0 2387.08602151 99% => OK
No of words: 368.0 408.028673835 90% => OK
Chars per words: 6.40760869565 5.86048508987 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48200974243 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.415760869565 0.338922669872 123% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.296195652174 0.251872472559 118% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.222826086957 0.174417080927 128% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.141304347826 0.112833075102 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72899695596 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54347826087 0.524397521467 104% => OK
Word variations: 60.1497288793 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 26.2857142857 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.2923973561 48.84282405 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.428571429 120.699889404 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2857142857 20.5533526081 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.644075263715 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.54480286738 144% => OK
Readability: 55.9052795031 45.7405998639 122% => OK
Elegance: 2.33333333333 1.45489161554 160% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317794827332 0.300154397459 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108387639304 0.103427244359 105% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.05398678562 0.0752933317313 72% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.549550245086 0.497263757937 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.164448326185 0.151897553556 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140852475403 0.114077575197 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0959053180666 0.0781384742642 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.381937482532 0.336927656856 113% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0257016361488 0.067059652881 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23709917226 0.210909579961 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715438361172 0.0618886996521 116% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 8.42114695341 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 13.6433691756 81% => OK
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Rates: 80 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24 Out of 30
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