The university has provided student who are going to enter university with two summer vocation grograms. Which one do you think is better for students?
1) take some college courses in advance. e.g. some courses that are related to students' major.
2) visit some history museums or historical relics.
ndeed education plays a crucial role in our life, and obtaining it in correct way and right direction is also equally important. But is it better to take college courses in advance during summer vacation or students should spend their holidays in visiting museums, relics etc. In my opinion students should opt for taking courses in advance because the its benefits far outweigh any negative repercussions.
First of all, advance study always help to excel in studies. The purpose of universities is to produce excellent students, who growth tremendously in their future endeavors and prove to be a responsible citizen for the country. Advance courses will help to obtain expertise in the subject and thus students get get higher grades. Also, organizations also consider those students who have excellent academic records, on the other hand those have low score get rejected. My own experience s a compelling example for this. When I was doing my masters in healthcare management, I decided to utilize my vacations by studying my major subjects in advance, for that I took help with my seniors, faculty members etc. Before the start of the semester I got a clear picture of my major subject and become more interested towards it. Therefore, it helped me tremendously in getting first position in the university.
Secondly, help with good career growth. After all everyne wants to obtain a good job after the education, which is the main focus of students as well as institutions. Advance couses will provide more profoiund knowledge in the field. Pupils can make a group of similar major students and perform projects or internships during holidays. This experience will help them greatly in getting a good job. Organizations always prefer students who have industrial exposures. Furthermore, visiting museums does not require more time that they have to spend their whole vacation. This can be done as a part time activity as well during weekends or evening time.
Above all, some people might be of the opinion that visiting museums provide students great exposure about the history in different fields. However, from my perspective advantages of studying the syllabus in advance can not beat the benefits of taking a tour in some history museums.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, after all, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14130434783 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74042412514 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576086956522 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.7270163449 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0952380952 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5238095238 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.52380952381 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247941092668 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0644323748175 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610457942795 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149615793716 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339270616568 0.0645574589148 53% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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